Asked by Courtney

I need help with parallelism i need to rewrite these sentences.
1. Because of prejudice in the corporation, not only did he leave but also sued for two million dollars; he did not win the case in court.
2. Since he wanted neither to get a ticket nor bother disable people he dis not park in the handicap space
3.Not only is steak on the menu but also soup and clam chowder that hand-prepared by the chef.
4. The man was told to either leave or eat with manners, but he never returned to that restaurant again.
5.the teacher was tentative about which day the vocab test would be scheduled; he could either give it on monday or tuesday
6. Not only was the student scrupulous, but at the end of the year he also received an award for his honesty.
7. Children are either dogmatic with their ideas or do not have any ideas
Answered by Writeacher
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/parallelism.htm

1. Because of prejudice in the corporation, not only did he leave but also sued for two million dollars; he did not win the case in court.
<b>Isolate all the verbs in here and check to see if each has a subject. Then rephrase to make a series of three.</b>

2. Since he wanted neither to get a ticket nor bother disable people he dis not park in the handicap space
<b>Typos in here? The unparallel part is in the dependent clause, relating to the phrasing with the correlative conjunctions: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/conjunctions.htm#correlative_conjunctions
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3.Not only is steak on the menu but also soup and clam chowder that hand-prepared by the chef.
<b>Again ... look at the phrasing re the correlative conjunctions. I also think there are words missing.

Now ... you work on these and let me know what you come up with.
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Answered by Courtney
Okay i read definition and everything i just really don't understand how to this
Answered by Writeacher
I'll re-do #2 for you. Then you MUST try the others ... one at a time, if you want.

Since he didn't want to get a ticket or bother disabled people, he did not park in the handicapped place.
Answered by Courtney
Ok will #1 be like this ?
Because of prejudice in the corporation, not only did he leave but also he sued for two million dollars; he did not win the case. ???
Answered by Writeacher
That's much better for #1, yes.

OK, now ... try #3.
Answered by Courtney
Not only is steak on the menu but also is soup abd clan chowder that was hand-prepared by the chef.
Answered by Writeacher
What was hand prepared by the chef? All three? the last two? only the chowder?

(delete "is" after "but also")
Answered by Courtney
Im not sure the orginal sentence is #3 but i think its just the 2( soup and clam chowder)
Answered by Writeacher
If you think it's the soup and chowder, then change that verb to "are" -- plural subject/plural verb, remember!

OK -- #4?
Answered by Courtney
But aslo are soup and clam .....?
4. The man was told either to leave or to eat with manners, but he never returned to that restuarant again.
Answered by Writeacher
Not only is steak on the menu, but also soup and clam chowder, that were hand-prepared by the chef.

(sorry ... change "was" to "were")

Notice where I've put commas.
Answered by Courtney
Oh okay , is 4 correct ?
Answered by Writeacher
Yes, 4 is fine.

#5?
Answered by Courtney
The teacher was tentative about which day the vocab test would be scheduled; he could either give it on monday or give it on tuesday. (Or is it givr it on monday or on tuesday)
Answered by Writeacher
... he could give it either on Monday or Tuesday.
Answered by Courtney
6. Not only was the student scrupulous, but also at the end of the year he received an award for his honesty
7. I have no clue
Answered by Courtney
Wait i think i know it

Either children are dogmatic with their ideas or children do not have any ideas
Answered by Writeacher
6. Not only was the student scrupulous, but also at the end of the year he received an award for his honesty
<b>The two things that need to be made parallel here are characteristics of the student -- make them "scrupulous" and "honest" <~~using those terms, not what's in the sentence as is, how will you revise this?</b>


7. Children are either dogmatic with their ideas or do not have any ideas

<b>In the first half of this sentence, it's "children are..." but the second half is "[children] have..."

The point is to make the verbs parallel, and then the rest of the sentence after the verbs match each other.

Give it a try.</b>
Answered by Courtney
Okay i don't quite get it but ill try
6. The student was not only scrupulous, but also received an award for honesty at the end of the year.

7. I don't really understand this one
By the way thank you so much for helping me youve been a huge help
Answered by Writeacher
I'd write these:

6. The student was scrupulous, and he received an award ...

7. Children either have dogmatic ideas or have none.
Answered by Courtney
So for 6 we dibt use not only but also ?
Answered by Writeacher
6 is a smoother sentence without those words.
Answered by Courtney
Okay thank you sooo much for your time and patience you really helped me alot !
Answered by Writeacher
You're very welcome. Parallel construction in English is not an easy topic, that's for sure!