Revised and errors corrected , is it ready for submittance?

Dear Mr. Dittmer:
I am writing to you to request a trainer for our seminar on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace for twenty of our office supervisors. Our company would also like to take this opportunity to thank you for Wydade’s reliable support in offering most of Broadworth’s training needs for the past 20 years.

We would like the seminar to be held on September 14, 2012, at 10 am. The seminar is to be two hours long with a 15-minute break during which refreshments will be provided. It will be held in our conference room on the first floor in room 105. The topics we need to be covered are ways to prevent, cope with, and report such harassment. At your convenience could you please send me a list of resources the trainer will need in order to make this seminar a success. We would also need to know what our supervisors should bring along with them to the seminar.

If you have any further questions, please do not hesitate to contact me at 802-585-8668. I look forward to another great seminar this year.

Sincerely,

Shawna Parker

Shawna Parker
Administrative Assitant

SP

3 answers

Everything reads well. The only question I have is about the word "offering" in the second sentence. Did they just offer the trainings? Or did they actually supply them?

I know it's all from your imagination, and it's rather picky. Just wondering!
Supplying probably lol :)
Yes, excellent!
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