Question

Would someone please check my work. I need to combine the following sentences into one by using a semicolon.

1)Abalone fishing in California is strictly regulated. A person is allowed to harvest only twenty-four of these large mollusks per year.

A)Abalone fishing in California is strictly regulated; a person may only harvest twenty-four of these large mollusks per year.

2)City life offers many advantages. In many ways, however, life in a small town is much more pleasant.

A)City life offers many
advantages; however, in many ways life in a small town is much more pleasant.

3)The door contains an inflatable slide to be used in an emergency. In addition, each seat can become a floatation device.

A)The door contains an inflatable slide to be used in an emergency; in addition, each seat can become a floatation device.

4)Most car accidents occur within twenty-five miles of the home. Therefore, you should wear a seat belt on every trip.

A)Most car accidents occur within twenty-five miles of the home; therefore, a seat belt should be worn on every trip.

5)Involvement in team sports provides more than just health benefits for young girls. It also increases their self-confidence.

A)Involvement in team sports provides more than just health benefits for young girls; their self-confidence is increased as well.

Thank you for the help.

Answer 1

All are correct.

Did you have a reason for changing the wording in the last sentence?

Answer 2

Honestly I feel like I did something wrong if I do not change the sentence in someway. I also thought it sounded better this way. How would have you written it?

Answer 3

I would have kept the same wording because it was a parallel structure with the first clause.

You didn't need to do anything but put in a semicolon in each sentence.

Answer 4

Okay, I will keep that in mind. I appreciate the advice.