Topic sentences belong at the beginning of each paragraph, not buried somewhere inside. It could also be the second sentence if there's a transitional sentence first which links the thoughts to the immediately preceding paragraph.
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i need to know if my sentences and grammar are clear, and if i have the correct topic sentence for each paragraph correct.
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If something will cost more than what it is worth because, you do not have the money to buy it is you can purchase it by financing it. Purchasing something by financing it can cost you highly in interest rates. If it were not something you needed like a house, I would wait until I could save up the money to buy it to avoid getting into debt. If not you could end up paying a high interest rate for it and well over more than it is worth. Paying a high interest rate for something that is not worth the price is not worth doing unless you do not mind over paying for things. When you can save up for it and purchase it with cash without any interest or debt. Why pay more for something with high interest that what it is worth, when you can find save and buy it. However, the choice is yours if you want to purchase something that has interest or not.
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When you do no have money to purchase something you want like a car. You can finance it to be able to get it. When financing something you have interest that comes with purchasing it. Depending on your credit, your interest rates can be very high or low. Paying interest means you will pay more for it than what it is worth. If you do not mind paying more than what something maybe worth and possibly getting into debt this way of purchasing may be for you. The decision is yours to make, when deciding it is important to know what you can and cannot afford. In addition, it is important you understand your contract and everything on it so that you are aware of what is needed to manage your payments. Having an high or low interest rate can affect your decision of making the purchase or not
1. my topic sentence is >Purchasing something by financing it can cost you highly in interest rates.
2. my topic sentence is>When financing something you have interest that comes with purchasing it.
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it is the second sentence. the underline didn't show up. so i typed it out. does it look correct?
1. Purchasing something by financing it can cost you in high interest rates.
rephrased slightly
2. When financing something you have interest that comes with purchasing it.
This is incorrect. The interest comes AFTER the purchase, not at the time of purchase.
rephrased slightly
2. When financing something you have interest that comes with purchasing it.
This is incorrect. The interest comes AFTER the purchase, not at the time of purchase.
thank you, no i didn't see that the last time. i re-wrote both of the paragraphs instead of using you, i put them in plural form.
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