Question

them: my tummy hurts! me: then eat something! them: IT STILL HURTS! me: wll what did you eat? them: i jsut ate that mcdonalds you jsut told me to eat! me: then spit it out! them: MY TUMMY STILL HURTS! me: *shoves a bottle of laxative in thier hand and shoives them towards the bathroom

Answer 1

Do you want this cleaned up, rewritten, expanded into a scene/comic, or turned into something funny/serious? I can do any of those — below are three quick options. Pick one or tell me what you want changed.

1) Cleaned-up version (corrected spelling/punctuation)
Them: "My tummy hurts."
Me: "Then eat something."
Them: "It still hurts!"
Me: "Well, what did you eat?"
Them: "I just ate that McDonald's you told me to eat."
Me: "Then spit it out!"
Them: "My tummy still hurts!"
Me: *shoves a bottle of laxative into their hand and shoves them toward the bathroom.*

2) Funnier/slapstick version
Them: "My tummy HURTS!"
Me: "Eat something."
Them: "I DID. IT STILL HURTS!"
Me: "What did you eat?"
Them: "The McDonald's you forced on me!"
Me: "Spit it out!"
Them: "It's too late—"
Me: *tosses a bottle of laxative like a grenade* "Go! Now!" *dramatic shove toward the bathroom door as the timpani of impending doom plays.*

3) Caring/realistic version
Them: "My stomach really hurts."
Me: "Do you want something bland? Toast, rice, or ginger?"
Them: "I already ate the McDonald's you suggested and now it hurts more."
Me: "Okay—sit down. Do you feel nauseous or like you need the bathroom? Let me get you water and check for fever."
Them: "I still feel awful."
Me: *hands them water and a mild over-the-counter remedy* "If it doesn't get better in an hour, we'll call a doctor or go to urgent care."

Which direction would you like me to expand into (longer scene, comic panels, tweetable line, etc.)?