Question

Kamoni is a troubled young man and is 14; sure, he has good grades, but he doesn’t really know his way through life. He's always quiet, shy, no friends, nobody to talk to, his family even knows that and his little brother. He isn’t really into making friends whatsoever, but one day he sees a famous electric guitar player on Television playing and that sparks his interest to play the electric guitar and learn rock. He really enjoys playing the guitar and for the next 2 and ½ years he plays, learns and practices the guitar and he also makes beats of his to his guitar playing. This guitar playing betters his social anxiety and introverted self. He is now 16. Kamoni even started a YouTube channel that gets popular over time, and it's basically him making beats and playing the electric guitar and making covers. (make the wording better, keep small and important and impactful details and make this better but also make it shorter)

Answer 1

At 14, Kamoni was a troubled, high-achieving boy — quiet, shy, and friendless, something his family and little brother all noticed. Seeing a famous electric guitarist on TV sparked him to learn rock; over the next two-and-a-half years he taught himself electric guitar, made beats to accompany his playing, and by 16 his YouTube covers and originals had grown popular and eased his social anxiety.