Question

1) My doubts were validated when my mother had to spend a fortune for a dress my sister was only going to wear for one night. (2) After watching my older sister spend more time contemplating her prom night than preparing for her finals, I suspected something about the prom was not right. (3) Not to mention, the stress of not being asked on a date until a few days before prom gave my sister uncontrollable breakouts. (4) One of her friends couldn't go to the prom because of she was running a high fever. (5) Watching my senior friends get caught up in trivialities and material things deeply saddened me. (6) I realized that soon it would be my turn to face the trauma of the prom night. (7) I realized that I did not want to go through with it. (8) Isn't it about time we started rethinking prom?
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What is the most effective way to improve the organization of this paragraph?
A.
add vivid modifiers to the sentences
B.
remove the concluding sentence
C.
switch the order of sentences 1 and 2
D.
break the passage into two paragraphs

Answer 1

C

Sentence 2 works better as the opening topic sentence (it introduces the narrator’s suspicion), and placing it before the specific example in sentence 1 makes the paragraph’s cause→examples→conclusion flow clearer.