Question

ead the sentence that appears in an argumentative essay about American public education.

Millions of dollars have been spent by taxpayers on programs to improve education.

Which revision offers the most improvement in sentence fluency?
Programs to improve education cost millions of dollars, and taxpayers need to pay for them.
Taxpayers have spent millions of dollars on programs to improve education.
So much money has been spent on education by way of taxes.
Programs endorsed by taxpayers have also been funded by taxpayers.

Answer 1

Taxpayers have spent millions of dollars on programs to improve education.

This revision improves fluency by using active voice and a clearer, more direct structure.