Question

Read the paragraph from Carmen’s personal narrative, “At Bat.”

“Carmen Martinez, number 42.” I took a deep breath as my name rumbled through the loudspeaker. I was so nervous! With each step from the on-deck circle to the batter’s box, I thought my knees would give out and I would collapse. My stomach was in knots.

One chance. I had one chance to help my team win this game so we could go to the state semifinals. I could hear the crowd cheering for me. “You got this!” they screamed. “You can do this!” I hoped I could.

Which is the best example of a vivid sensory detail?
“I was so nervous!”
“I thought my knees would give out and I would collapse.”
“I had one chance to help my team win this game so we could go to the state semifinals.”
“I hoped I could.”

Answer 1

“I thought my knees would give out and I would collapse.”

This line describes a physical, bodily sensation (the feeling in her knees and the fear of collapsing), which is a vivid sensory detail. The others express emotions or thoughts rather than a specific sensory experience.