Question

Read the excerpt from a student’s essay.

As Rainsford enters the dining room, he immediately becomes aware of Zaroff’s expensive and sophisticated taste. He notes the decorations, the food, the drink, all of which are exquisite and advertise Zaroff’s privileged aristocratic upbringing. Rainsford is initially impressed by the general’s home and finds him to be a "thoughtful and affable host.”

Which revision would best help expand the ideas in the excerpt?

adding some of the dialogue between Rainsford and Zaroff.
adding that Rainsford comes from a privileged background as well.
adding that the residence is situated on a wild overgrown island.
adding a more-detailed description of the decorations, food, and drink.

Answer 1

adding a more-detailed description of the decorations, food, and drink.

Reason: the paragraph asserts Zaroff’s refined taste; expanding with concrete sensory details (what the decorations look like, what foods and drinks are served) will develop and support that claim more effectively than the other options.