Question

any run on sentences or grammer issues: Start with Hypothesis:



Something I already acknowledge about my topic, is that Smartphone usage can lead to children, teenagers, young adults, and even adults to become off task. Wether it’s in work, school, or just normal house chores.



Spot the Pattern:



Key patterns are observed all the time for example, one of the patterns is negative association which means higher total daily smartphone usage usually results in lower grade\GPA. Smartphone usage also leads to patterns such as, distractions and multitasking for example, most kids who are studying constantly switch between notifications and games back to studying or homework, and this will frequently result in loss of intention span.



Test Data:



The information I gathered about this topic is that kids in my grade with smartphones have social media, like TikTok and Instagram, and are always people who don't take school seriously. For example, bad influences, cussing, smoking, low grades, and low intention spans. Now not all people are like that, but still having a smartphone as a scholar student can affect your grades and make you lose focus. I gathered this information by closely studying my classmates, and the classmates with smartphones have the lowest intention spans and are unable to focus on the work. Even the scholar students are coming to school sleeping due to being up on a smartphone all night and the grades are deteriorating.



Confirm if Your Idea is True or Not:

After all I discovered my idea is correct because it shows and supports with real life data and scientific patterns the Smartphones can greatly impact a student's academic performance

Answer 1

Yes — there are several run-on sentences, comma splices, spelling errors, and wording issues. I revised your text for grammar, clarity, and flow and then listed the main corrections.

Revised version

Start with hypothesis:
Something I already acknowledge about my topic is that smartphone use can cause children, teenagers, young adults, and even adults to become off-task, whether it’s at work, at school, or during household chores.

Spot the pattern:
Key patterns are observed all the time. For example, one pattern is a negative association: higher total daily smartphone use usually correlates with a lower GPA. Smartphone use also leads to distractions and multitasking. Many students studying constantly switch between notifications and games and their homework, which frequently results in a loss of attention span.

Test data:
The information I gathered about this topic is that kids in my grade with smartphones use social media like TikTok and Instagram and are often students who do not take school seriously. Examples include bad influences, cursing, smoking, low grades, and short attention spans. Not all students are like that, but having a smartphone can affect grades and make it harder to focus. I gathered this information by observing my classmates: those with smartphones tend to have the shortest attention spans and trouble focusing on work. Even high-achieving students are coming to school tired from being on their phones all night, and their grades are deteriorating.

Confirm whether the idea is true:
Overall, my observations and existing scientific patterns support my idea that smartphones can negatively impact a student’s academic performance.

Main grammar/usage fixes I made
- Fixed run-on sentences and comma splices by splitting long sentences or adding proper conjunctions/punctuation.
- Corrected spelling: “Wether” → “whether”.
- Corrected word choice: “intention span” → “attention span”; “usage” → “use” (consistent style).
- Improved punctuation and capitalization (e.g., “GPA”).
- Replaced awkward phrases (“scholar student”) with “student” or “high-achieving student”.
- Improved consistency and clarity; removed some redundancies.

If you want, I can:
- Tighten the wording further for formal academic tone.
- Turn this into a short paragraph summary or into bullet points.
- Suggest ways to add evidence or citations to strengthen the argument.