Question

Read the following sentence, which needs revising, editing, and proofreading:

The hot, humid greenhouse is a site for sore eyes starved of color by winter whiteness: orchids bloom in all the color of the rainbow and ferns greenery is all over.

Which revision below is most effective?


It was hot in the greenhouse, and humid. Orchids and ferns grew colorfully, in contrast to eyes bored by winter’s whiteness.


Orchids and ferns filled the greenhouse, bringing relief to eyes starved of color by winter’s whiteness.


The greenhouse is hot and humid, and it is a site for sore eyes starved of color by winter’s whiteness because orchids bloom in all the colors of the rainbow and green ferns grow all over.


In the midst of the colorless white winter, the inside of the glass greenhouse was a sight for sore eyes. Orchids bloomed like a multi-color rainbow amid the leafy greenery of ferns.

Answer 1

Option 2.

It’s concise, clear, grammatical, and preserves the original image (orchids and ferns relieving winter’s lack of color) without the awkward phrasing of the other choices.