Question

Read the following passage:

Javier trained for his first marathon for months. He learned to pace himself and to push through the pain. He developed blisters and shin splints. It broke his heart not to finish.

Which revision below most effectively uses transitions to create coherence?


Javier trained for his first marathon for months. He learned to pace himself and to push through the pain. Also, he developed blisters and shin splints. Similarly, it broke his heart not to finish.


Javier trained for his first marathon for months after he learned to pace himself and to push through the pain. Additionally, he developed blisters and shin splints. In the end, it broke his heart not to finish.


Javier trained for his first marathon for months. First, he learned to pace himself and to push through the pain. Next, he developed blisters and shin splints. Finally, it broke his heart not to finish.


Javier trained for his first marathon for months. He learned to pace himself and to push through the pain. But during the race, he developed blisters and shin splints. Because of that he had to stop, and it broke his heart when he couldn’t finish.

Answer 1

The last revision (Option D). It uses transitions that clarify contrast and cause-effect—“But during the race…” and “Because of that…”—making the sequence and reasons coherent.