Question

The claim is somewhat sound, but not logical enough. The first reason that the author writes seems logical. He tells the reader that higher fines result in lesser speeding, so it should improve safety. However, the second reason is not as logical. The reason that if people can afford a 50 dollar fine, they can afford a 100$ fine is not logical because not everyone can afford that fine.

pls proofread this and keep my wording and list all errors pls

Answer 1

Corrected version (minimal changes, keeping your wording):

The claim is somewhat sound, but not logical enough. The first reason the author writes seems logical. He tells the reader that higher fines result in less speeding, so they should improve safety. However, the second reason is not as logical. The argument that if people can afford a $50 fine, they can afford a $100 fine is not logical because not everyone can afford that fine.

List of errors and suggested fixes

1. "The claim is somewhat sound, but not logical enough."
- Issue: stylistic/vague — "somewhat sound" and "not logical enough" is redundant and imprecise.
- Suggestion: keep if you want the same tone; otherwise use clearer phrasing (e.g., "The claim has some merit but is not fully logical.").

2. "The first reason that the author writes seems logical."
- Issue: wording is awkward — "that the author writes" is clunky.
- Suggestion: change to "The first reason the author writes seems logical." (I used this minimal change in the correction.)

3. "lesser speeding"
- Issue: incorrect/unnatural phrase. "Lesser" is not used with uncountable nouns like "speeding."
- Suggestion: use "less speeding" or "reduced speeding." (I used "less speeding" in the correction.)

4. "so it should improve safety."
- Issue: pronoun agreement/ambiguity — "it" doesn’t clearly refer to "higher fines" (plural).
- Suggestion: use "they" or "this" to match the subject. (I used "they" in the correction.)

5. "the second reason is not as logical."
- Issue: slightly awkward; "not as logical" is acceptable but could be stronger (e.g., "less convincing").
- Suggestion: optional stylistic change to "less convincing" if you prefer.

6. "The reason that if people can afford a 50 dollar fine, they can afford a 100$ fine..."
- Issues:
a) Awkward phrasing: "The reason that if..." — better as "The argument/claim that..."
b) Inconsistent and incorrect currency formatting: use "$50" and "$100" or "a $50 fine" and "a $100 fine."
c) Clarity: "that fine" at the end is ambiguous (which fine?).
- Suggestion: change to "The argument that if people can afford a $50 fine, they can afford a $100 fine is not logical because not everyone can afford that fine." (I used "The argument" and consistent "$50"/"$100" formatting in the correction.)

7. "100$" and "50 dollar"
- Issue: inconsistent currency notation; standard English places the dollar sign before the number ("$100") and "50 dollar" should be "a $50".
- Suggestion: use "$50" and "$100" consistently.

8. Repetition of "not logical"
- Issue: phrase "not logical" is used twice in the paragraph; could be repetitive.
- Suggestion: vary wording if you want stronger prose (e.g., "unconvincing," "flawed").

9. "pls" in your request
- Issue: informal text-message abbreviation; in formal writing use "please."
- Suggestion: use "please" if the tone should be formal.

If you want, I can rewrite the paragraph more smoothly (not just minimal fixes) or suggest alternate phrasings for clarity and style.