Question

The key concept of this paragraph is deforestation by humans. The author develops the key concept by first using a fact in the first sentence to hook the reader. Next, the author gives examples of what and why people do deforestation. The paragraph also mentions wild fires can cause deforestation, but states that it is a natural cause and is more common for humans to do deforestation more. Finally, the authors states that forests are too important for people, animals, and the environment, so it should be stopped.

proofread this and keep my wording and pls list the fixed errors

Answer 1

Corrected paragraph:

The key concept of this paragraph is deforestation by humans. The author develops the key concept by first using a fact in the first sentence to hook the reader. Next, the author gives examples of what and why people cause deforestation. The paragraph also mentions that wildfires can cause deforestation, but states that this is a natural cause and that humans cause deforestation more often. Finally, the author states that forests are too important for people, animals, and the environment, so it should be stopped.

List of fixed errors (original → correction) with brief explanations:
- "what and why people do deforestation" → "what and why people cause deforestation"
(word choice: "cause deforestation" is grammatically correct)
- "wild fires" → "wildfires"
(spelling: one word)
- added "that" in "mentions that wildfires..."
(grammar: clarity/flow)
- "but states that it is a natural cause and is more common for humans to do deforestation more." → "but states that this is a natural cause and that humans cause deforestation more often."
(grammar and redundancy: removed awkward/redundant phrasing and clarified meaning)
- "authors states" → "author states"
(subject-verb agreement and possessive: singular "author" with correct verb)

If you want an even closer version that keeps more original phrasing (or a stronger revision for clarity), tell me which you prefer.