Question

Read Mustafa’s introduction to his argumentative essay.

Do you ever feel like everywhere you look you are bombarded by advertising? There are video advertisements during TV shows, in cell phone apps, and on the Internet. There are paper ads in newspapers and magazines, on billboards, and even on public transportation. Last week, I was riding home on the school bus and was startled to notice that there were ads on the ceiling of my school bus.

Mustafa should revise the introduction because he should

state a claim.
hook the reader.
add some reasons.
remove his viewpoint.
Mark this and return

Answer 1

state a claim.

The introduction has a good hook and examples but does not present Mustafa’s main argument (thesis), which he needs to state so the essay has a clear claim to support.