Question

Brad is writing an argumentative essay for his debate class claiming that banning soda machines in his high school will not affect the rates of obesity and type 2 diabetes. Read the draft of his conclusion and complete the task that follows.

It is important that schools look at other ways that students may be getting sodas in order to make the soda machine ban effective. A ban on soda machines alone will not affect the rate of obesity and type 2 diabetes. Our society encourages drinking soda through advertisements that only show how popular it is to drink soda and not how dangerous it is. People will have to be educated on the health risks of drinking soda before this kind of ban will be seen as helpful instead of a punishment.


Revise Brad's draft by choosing the two best options that improve the cohesion of his conclusion.
A.
On the contrary, it is important that schools look at other ways that students may be getting sodas in order to make the ban effective. A ban on soda machines alone will not affect the rate of obesity and type 2 diabetes. Besides, our society encourages drinking soda through advertisements that only show how popular it is to drink soda and not how dangerous it is. People will have to be educated on the health risks of drinking soda before this kind of ban will be seen as helpful instead of a punishment.

B.
In conclusion, it is important that schools look at other ways that students may be getting sodas in order to make the ban effective. A ban on soda machines alone will not affect the rate of obesity and type 2 diabetes. Our society encourages drinking soda through advertisements that only show how popular it is to drink soda and not how dangerous it is. Given these points, people will have to be educated on the health risks of drinking soda before this kind of ban will be seen as helpful instead of a punishment.

C.
First, it is important that schools look at other ways that students may be getting sodas in order to make the ban effective. Second, a ban on soda machines alone will not affect the rate of obesity and type 2 diabetes. In addition, our society encourages drinking soda through advertisements that only show how popular it is to drink soda and not how dangerous it is People will have to be educated on the health risks of drinking soda before this kind of ban will be seen as helpful instead of a punishment.

D.
Therefore, it is important that schools look at other ways that students may be getting sodas in order to make the ban effective. In short, a ban on soda machines alone will not affect the rate of obesity and type 2 diabetes. Our society encourages drinking soda through advertisements that only show how popular it is to drink soda and not how dangerous it is. All in all, people will have to be educated on the health risks of drinking soda before this kind of ban will be seen as helpful instead of a punishment.

E.
In other words, it is important that schools look at other ways that students may be getting sodas in order to make the soda machine ban effective. For this reason, a ban on soda machines alone will not affect the rate of obesity and type 2 diabetes. Our society encourages drinking soda through advertisements that only show how popular it is to drink soda and not how dangerous it is. That is to say, people will have to be educated on the health risks of drinking soda before this kind of ban will be seen as helpful instead of a punishment.

Answer 1

Choices B and D.

- B adds clear concluding signals ("In conclusion" and "Given these points") that tie the points together smoothly.
- D uses logical transitions ("Therefore," "In short," "All in all,") that link the evidence to the final recommendation.

(A and E use inappropriate or awkward transition phrases; C reads like a list and contains a punctuation error.)