Question

here was a stockyard. Jurgis worked there. His coworkers told stories. They described horrific working conditions.

Which revision most effectively combines the sentences?


Jurgis worked at a stockyard, and his coworkers told stories describing the horrific working
conditions there.


At a stockyard, Jurgis worked and his coworkers told stories about horrific
working conditions.


There was a stockyard Jurgis worked at, and horrific working conditions were described
by his coworkers.


Jurgis, working at a stockyard, heard stories about horrific working conditions from
his coworkers.

Answer 1

"Jurgis, working at a stockyard, heard stories about horrific working conditions from his coworkers."

This version is the clearest and most concise: it uses active voice, places modifiers correctly, and avoids awkward or passive constructions.