Question

Read these sentences about the excerpt from The Jungle.

There was a stockyard. Jurgis worked there. His coworkers told stories. They described horrific working conditions.

Which revision most effectively combines the sentences?


Jurgis worked at a stockyard, and his coworkers told stories describing the horrific working
conditions there.


There was a stockyard Jurgis worked at, and horrific working conditions were described
by his coworkers.


Jurgis, working at a stockyard, heard stories about horrific working conditions from
his coworkers.


At a stockyard, Jurgis worked and his coworkers told stories about horrific
working conditions.

Answer 1

"Jurgis, working at a stockyard, heard stories about horrific working conditions from his coworkers."

This version is most effective because it’s concise, uses active voice, avoids awkward word order and repetition, and clearly links Jurgis, his workplace, and the stories he heard.