Question

he planet Jupiter, named for the king of the Roman gods, has rings composed of dust particles ejected during impact with incoming comets and asteroids.

Which words should be changed to make the sentence more appropriate for a general audience?

Jupiter and Roman
rings and dust
composed and ejected
named and during

Answer 1

Change "composed" and "ejected." Those are more formal/technical; simpler alternatives (e.g., "made of" and "knocked off" or "thrown off") suit a general audience.

Revised sentence:
"The planet Jupiter, named for the king of the Roman gods, has rings made of dust particles knocked off by impacts from incoming comets and asteroids."