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Start at the bus stop on the corner of Washington and Madison Streets. Get on the A126 bus to Ridgefield. Pass three stops and get off at the fourth, which is Jefferson Street. Walk several blocks. The restaurant will be on the southwest corner of Jefferson Street and Adams Way.
Which revision most makes these directions easier to follow?
It is best if you start at the bus stop on the corner of Washington and Madison Streets.
Get on the A126 bus, which should be flashing its number, to Ridgefield.
Walk along Jefferson Street for exactly seven blocks.
The lavish restaurant will be on the southwest corner of Jefferson Street and Adams Way.

Answer 1

The revision does not make the directions easier to follow. It adds wordiness and unnecessary or uncertain details ("It is best if…", "should be flashing its number", "lavish") and substitutes a specific but unsupported detail ("exactly seven blocks").

A clearer revision:
Start at the bus stop at Washington and Madison Streets. Take the A126 bus to Ridgefield. After passing three stops, get off at the fourth (Jefferson Street). Walk several blocks along Jefferson Street; the restaurant is on the southwest corner of Jefferson Street and Adams Way.