Question

i want to write somthign about cars and drifting cuz im a car guy i lave nissan silvia s14 and 15 and dodge challenger demon 170 if that helps also im a lover thats been broken too many times from my first true love to my 3rd i miss my third a bunch i used to play games with her and do everything with her i miss her so much evers since then love just hasent felt the same i feel broken and discouraged depressed even wondering if ill find my significant other ever or if im just worthless looser

Portfolio Assignment:
Write two poems using different forms. They can be from your own point of view about something you feel strongly about, or they can be from the perspective of someone–or something–else.

Poem types (no limited to these):


Modified Rubric:
Category
Features
Points
Poetic Form
Follows a specific poetic form
Includes all elements necessary to the form (rhyme scheme, line number/length/meter, etc.)
1-point for form
3-points for following elements
Poetic Elements
Writing uses strong imagery, tone, word choice
Writing includes at least three purposeful literary/poetic techniques (underlined and labeled)
5-points for imagery/tone/words
3-points for literary techniques
Language
Spelling is correct
Quality words used
1-point for spelling
1-point for word choice




14 points total

Answer 1

I’m really sorry you’ve been hurt so many times — that pain and that emptiness matter. You sound exhausted and lonely; it’s understandable to feel discouraged after losing someone you did everything with. If you’re feeling like you might hurt yourself, please contact local emergency services or a crisis line right now (in the U.S. call 988; elsewhere, your local emergency number or a local crisis helpline). If you want, I can help find resources in your area. If not in immediate danger, talking to a trusted friend, family member, or a therapist can help too — you don’t have to carry this alone.

Below are two poems in different forms for your portfolio. I used your car details (S14, S15, Demon 170) and your heartbreak as inspiration. I also underlined and labeled at least three literary techniques as your rubric asks, and I noted each poem’s form and adherence to form elements.

Poem 1 — Shakespearean-style sonnet (14 lines; rhyme scheme ABAB CDCD EFEF GG)
The steering wheel returns the hush I feel (A)
When midnight pours like oil and eats the night (B)
My S14 remembers every nick and wheel (A)
Headlamps carve silver promises of light (B)
I lean the chassis into crooked dance (C)
And let the brakes forgive what I will not (D)
Those sideways arcs keep tally of our chance (C)
While tires confess in smoke the things I sought (D)
The Demon growls, a demon with a gift (E)
And laughter echoes, fossilized from past (F)
My heart still hunts the torque inside the drift (E)
A map of vows lies folded, torn, and cast (F)
I park beneath a moon that smelled like home (G)
Yet even parked, my pulse keeps whispering roam (G)

Underlined techniques in the sonnet:
- _midnight pours like oil_ (simile) — paints night as a viscous force, blending car and mood imagery.
- _tires confess in smoke_ (personification) — gives the car’s actions human emotion.

Form note: 14 lines, ABAB CDCD EFEF GG rhyme pattern used; sonnet form satisfied.

Poem 2 — Haiku (5-7-5 syllables)
Tires smoke and lights blur (5)
_Chasing ghosts of who we were_ (7) (metaphor)
Night eats the rear light (5)

Underlined technique in the haiku:
- _Chasing ghosts of who we were_ (metaphor) — the “ghosts” stand in for memories and the relationship you miss.

Poetic elements (rubric):
- Imagery/tone/word choice: Both poems use strong car imagery (steering wheel, tires, S14, Demon, drift) blended with emotional imagery (ghosts, moon, laughter fossilized). Tone moves from restless/controlled (drifting) to tender and mournful (loss, remembering). I used evocative verbs and nouns (confess, fossilized, growls) to create vivid scenes.
- Literary/poetic techniques: at least three are underlined and labeled above (simile, personification, metaphor).
- Language/spelling: Checked for standard spelling and clear word choice.

If you’d like, I can:
- Rework either poem to include S15 or more specific references (tune names, colors, mods).
- Make the sonnet stricter on meter (iambic pentameter) if your teacher expects it.
- Adjust tone — angrier, more hopeful, or more technical/car-focused.

Also — if you want to talk more about how you’re feeling, or need help finding someone to talk to (friend, counselor, or crisis resources), tell me your country or region and I’ll help find options. You don’t have to go through this alone.