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Revising and Editing

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Adda is writing an explanatory essay on ancient foods. In her essay, four sections of text have been underlined. In each instance, the underlined text may require a correction or revision. Read Adda’s essay, paying special attention to the underlined text, and then answer the questions that follow.

Eating the Past

(1) Most of us think of archaeology as the process of digging up and studying ancient objects, not of making new creations. (2) But one branch of archaeology experimental archaeology offers a new approach. (3) It uses experiments in the present to develop and test conclusions about the past. (4) Let’s say that an archaeologist believes that an ancient group of people made pottery using a certain method and obtained their materials from a specific site. (5) The archaeologist wants to test this hypothesis and might do so by making his or her own pottery using the given method and materials and then compare the results to artifacts from the group. (6) If the new pottery matches the ancient artifacts, the hypothesis is confirmed.
(7) Farrell Monaco is an experimental archaeologist who specializes in the study of ancient foods. (8) When someone at a dig site unearths traces of an ingredient for an ancient dish, a reconstructed mural—turns out to depict a meal including the dish, or when someone recovers a stone tablet featuring an ancient recipe for the dish, Monaco and others might attempt to re-create the dish in their own kitchens.
(9) Monaco counts her re-creation of ancient Roman bread as one of her successes. (10) In AD 79, the volcano Vesuvius erupted, destroying the cities of Pompeii and Herculaneum. (11) Bread baking in the bakery ovens of these cities instantly turned to charcoal (12) By examining such carbonized loaves, Monaco was able to determine what her replica should look like. (13) Then, using an ancient recipe, she worked at re-creating an ancient Roman loaf. (14) After several trials she finally produced a batch she was happy with and she even said that she would serve the results at her own table. (15) Monaco values a few things in reconstructing an ancient dish, rather than simply studying artifacts like other archaeologists experiencing “all the aspects of what it would have been like to have been the original creator or user”; gaining “a much clearer glimpse into Roman daily life”; and returning to our “food roots” by spending time preparing, not just consuming, food. (“Experimental archaeologist Farrell Monaco”) (16) Hopefully, her guests will enjoy eating a bite from the past!
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Source Quoted “Experimental archaeologist Farrell Monaco takes pandemic-era baking into the deep past by re-creating ancient Roman bread.” Sapiens Anthropology Magazine. Podcast. Oct. 27, 2020. Accessed June 3, 2024.


Which revision of sentence 8 improves the sentence by maintaining parallel structure of clauses?
A. When someone at a dig site unearths traces of an ingredient for an ancient dish, when a reconstructed mural turns out to depict a meal including the dish, or someone recovers a stone tablet featuring an ancient recipe for the dish, Monaco and others might attempt to re-create the dish in their own kitchens.
B. When someone at a dig site unearths traces of an ingredient for an ancient dish, when a reconstructed mural turns out to depict a meal including the dish, or when someone recovers a stone tablet featuring an ancient recipe for the dish, Monaco and others might attempt to re-create the dish in their own kitchens.
C. When someone at a dig site unearths traces of an ingredient for an ancient dish, a reconstructed mural turns out to depict a meal including the dish, or recovering a stone tablet featuring an ancient recipe for the dish, Monaco and others might attempt to re-create the dish in their own kitchens.
D. No change is needed

Answer 1

B

All three subordinate clauses begin with "when," keeping the sentence structure parallel and grammatically correct.