Question

Can you proofread my essay and list all grammar errors? pls dont change my wording


They race down the identical hallways hoping that their luck will change. Franklin reports have fever like symptoms and Benjamin knows that they’ve spent a long time looking for this thing. He has to tell him to fight it and continue moving. They move until they see a small label on the wall that says “SCP-500 ”. They go the way the arrow is pointing and in 10 minutes, they find SCP-500. They only have 3 minutes until Franklin goes into a coma, so they enter the containment chamber and find a small red pill. They give it to Franklin, who’s slouched against the wall. Franklin consumes the pill, and almost instantly Franklin looks better. Relieved, they all stand up and backtrack to the exit of this facility.

They find the exit of the facility with no further problems, Benjamin and the others get into the car, relieved. They take time to admire the scenery of the lush green forest. “How about we just stay on track next time?” Ulgrin suggests. No one argues with him, as they don’t want a situation like this happening ever again. So, with their problems solved, they head back home, happy with their outcome.

Answer 1

Thanks — I’ll only point out errors and explain them; I haven’t changed your original wording. Below are the grammar (and a few punctuation/style) issues I found, with a brief explanation and a suggested fix in parentheses.

1) Sentence: "Franklin reports have fever like symptoms and Benjamin knows that they’ve spent a long time looking for this thing."
- Problems:
- Unclear/incorrect subject phrase: "Franklin reports have ..." is awkward and likely missing a verb or incorrect noun form (unclear who/what "reports" refers to).
- Hyphenation: "fever like" should be hyphenated as a compound adjective: "fever-like".
- Compound sentence: two independent clauses linked by "and" should have a comma before "and".
- Pronoun ambiguity: "they’ve" has no clear antecedent.
- Suggested fixes (examples): ("Franklin reports having fever-like symptoms, and Benjamin knows that they’ve spent..." or "Franklin has fever-like symptoms, and Benjamin knows that he’s spent...")

2) Sentence: "He has to tell him to fight it and continue moving."
- Problem: Pronoun ambiguity — it's unclear who "He" and "him" refer to.
- Suggested fix: (clarify the referents, e.g., "Benjamin has to tell Franklin to fight it...")

3) Sentence: "They move until they see a small label on the wall that says “SCP-500 ”."
- Problem: Punctuation: the arrow symbol inside the quotes is fine, but the closing punctuation and quote placement is slightly awkward typographically. (Not strictly grammar, just typographic/formatting.)

4) Sentence: "They go the way the arrow is pointing and in 10 minutes, they find SCP-500."
- Problems:
- Comma placement: the comma after "in 10 minutes" is unnecessary. (Prefer: "and in 10 minutes they find..." or "They go the way the arrow is pointing, and in 10 minutes they find...")
- Optional: consider comma before "and" if you treat the clauses as coordinate.

5) Sentence: "They only have 3 minutes until Franklin goes into a coma, so they enter the containment chamber and find a small red pill."
- Problems:
- Word choice: "until" is understandable but many would use "before" here (style, not strict grammar).
- Numeral use: in formal writing, numbers under 10 are often spelled out ("three"). (Style, not strict grammar.)

6) Sentence: "Franklin consumes the pill, and almost instantly Franklin looks better."
- Problems:
- Repetition: repeating "Franklin" is stylistic, not grammatical.
- Comma after "instantly" would improve flow: "and almost instantly, Franklin looks better." (minor punctuation)

7) Sentence: "They find the exit of the facility with no further problems, Benjamin and the others get into the car, relieved."
- Problem: Comma splice — two independent clauses are joined only by a comma. This is a grammatical error.
- Suggested fixes: (use a period or semicolon, or add a conjunction: "...no further problems. Benjamin and the others..." or "...no further problems; Benjamin and the others...")

8) Sentence: “How about we just stay on track next time?” Ulgrin suggests.
- Note: This is acceptable; some style guides would format dialogue tags differently, but it’s not strictly incorrect. (If you wanted a different tag form you might write: "How about we just stay on track next time?" suggests Ulgrin. — but original is fine.)

9) Sentence: "No one argues with him, as they don’t want a situation like this happening ever again."
- Problem: Slightly awkward gerund clause: "a situation like this happening ever again" reads awkwardly; many writers prefer "...a situation like this to happen again." (style/syntax)

10) Overall: Pronoun-antecedent clarity
- Several places use "they," "he," "him" where the antecedent is unclear (especially early on). This can confuse readers; clarify which characters each pronoun refers to.

Those are the main grammar and punctuation issues. Most items are punctuation, hyphenation, comma splice, and pronoun-antecedent clarity. If you want, I can produce a corrected version that implements these fixes while keeping your wording as close as possible.