Question

Can you proofread my essay and list all grammar errors? pls dont change my wording


He shouldn’t have trusted that map. When his phone died, Benjamin thought it was a good idea to use the map at the back of the car. Now, it had been hours since he last saw civilization. He had been in this gigantic green forest for hours. Behind him, Ulgrin and Franklin are talking. 5 minutes pass, and Ulgrin asks Benjamin, “Are you sure we should be going this way?” Benjamin wants to reassure him that they’re fine but stays silent instead. They continue driving in silence. It starts to rain heavily, and Benjamin starts to worry. Benjamin comes across a fork in the road and contemplates whether to go left or right. He notices that the left side has car tracks on it, so he figures that it must be the right way. The rain comes down as a barrage, hammering the car roof. The car slows to a stop on the wet, muddy, dirt. Franklin looks to Ulgrin for a moment before looking at Benjamin, who’s staring off into the distance.

Franklin worries about the car stopping, as he’s terrified at the concept of having no gas left. Ulgrin, also curious about the car stopping, unbuckles his seat belt and moves to the middle. He now understands why Benjamin stopped. Franklin persists with his worrying, and Ulgrin thought that Franklin was worrying too much. They had gas in the back of the car. At least he thought so. Benjamin turns around to them and explains that they found some sort of facility. Franklin suggests that they turn around and keep driving, but Benjamin doesn’t hear him as he’s too focused on the barrier gate arm being destroyed. As a matter of fact, the whole place looks wrecked. Curiosity gets the better of him, and so he drives inside.

There’s a gigantic concrete wall with the words “SCP” on it. The area seems to be somewhat covered in wildlife, letting them know that this facility is most likely abandoned. Ulgrin suggests that they go inside the facility since there’s nothing stopping them. Franklin disagrees with the idea and insists that they just leave. However, it’s two votes against one. They all open the car door and bolt inside the facility to avoid getting too wet. As they enter, the rain becomes quieter, becoming muffled. The sounds of lights buzzing, ventilation systems, and muffled noises that sound otherworldly, all fill the air. Franklin continues to argue that they should leave, but neither Benjamin nor Ulgrin pay attention to him.

They walk until they find a door on the side with an icon next to it. The icon is a white square with the words “SCP-008. OBJECT CLASS: EUCLID.” The rest of the icon is broken. They all walk into the room despite the broken icon. After passing a multitude of doors, they’re met with a pipe releasing gas. Its franklin who approaches the pipe with caution. He touches the gas with his hand, and nothing happens. “I don’t get it. It’s just gas...” Benjamin find a paper on the floor and reads it. The paper explains what the gas is, but he only reads the highlighted text that says “100% infectiousness. 100% lethality.” He shows the paper to Ulgrin and Franklin, they panic. They only have 3 hours until franklin goes into a coma, which is considered death on the paper.

They all panic, wondering what to do. It’s franklin that’s practically screaming, “What are we going to do?!” Benjamin continues the read the paper in hopes for something, and he does. At the bottom of the paper, it reads: “Addendum 008-1: SCP-500 has been found to be able to completely cure SCP-008 even in the advanced stages of the disease.” Benjamin shows this to them, and they all calm down a bit. “We must find this... SCP 500 thing and use it to cure Franklin. We only have 3 hours and counting to find it. Let’s go!”
They bolt down the corridors, looking out for anything that helps them find what they need. Franklin begins coughing as they run down the corridors. They’re approaching a door when it opens by itself. Behind that door is a statue with an odd shape. They look at it and it doesn’t move. They back away from the door and both Ulgrin and Franklin look behind them. Benjamin blinks and in less than a second, the statue is right in front of him. He yells to the others to keep looking at it as they go into another hallway. They continue to run until they find a place labeled as “Light Containment Zone.” They figure that it might contain what they’re looking for, so they go in.

Answer 1

Below I list the grammar errors I found, in order of appearance. I have not rewritten your sentences — I show the incorrect fragment (as in your text), explain the problem, and give a minimal suggested correction for that fragment.

Major overall issue
- Inconsistent verb tense: the narration frequently switches between past and present (e.g., "He had been..." then "are talking" then "pass"). Choose past or present and keep it consistent. Most of your text is past, so the suggestions below change verbs to past tense.

Specific errors (by occurrence)

1) "Behind him, Ulgrin and Franklin are talking."
- Problem: Present tense "are talking" in a past-tense narrative.
- Suggestion: change "are talking" → "were talking"

2) "5 minutes pass, and Ulgrin asks Benjamin, ..."
- Problems: Use of numeral "5" (style; spell out under ten) and present tense "pass" / "asks".
- Suggestions: "Five minutes passed, and Ulgrin asked Benjamin, ..."

3) "Benjamin wants to reassure him that they’re fine but stays silent instead."
- Problems: Present tense "wants" / contraction "they’re" (inconsistent) and missing comma before "but".
- Suggestions: "Benjamin wanted to reassure him that they were fine, but stayed silent instead."

4) "They continue driving in silence."
- Problem: Present tense "continue".
- Suggestion: "They continued driving in silence."

5) "It starts to rain heavily, and Benjamin starts to worry."
- Problem: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "It started to rain heavily, and Benjamin started to worry."

6) "Benjamin comes across a fork in the road and contemplates whether to go left or right."
- Problem: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "Benjamin came across a fork ... and contemplated whether to go left or right."

7) "He notices that the left side has car tracks on it, so he figures that it must be the right way."
- Problem: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "He noticed ... so he figured ..."

8) "The rain comes down as a barrage, hammering the car roof."
- Problems: Present tense "comes", and phrasing "hammering the car roof" (missing preposition or possessive suggested).
- Suggestions: "The rain came down as a barrage, hammering on the car roof." or "hammering the car's roof."

9) "The car slows to a stop on the wet, muddy, dirt."
- Problems: Present tense "slows"; unnecessary comma between "muddy" and "dirt"; awkward noun choice "dirt" after "the".
- Suggestions: "The car slowed to a stop on the wet, muddy dirt." (remove comma) or "on the wet, muddy ground."

10) "Franklin looks to Ulgrin for a moment before looking at Benjamin, who’s staring off into the distance."
- Problems: Present tense "looks", contraction "who’s" (inconsistent).
- Suggestion: "Franklin looked to Ulgrin ... before looking at Benjamin, who was staring off into the distance."

11) "Franklin worries about the car stopping, as he’s terrified at the concept of having no gas left."
- Problems: Present tense "worries"; contraction "he’s"; "concept of" is awkward (stylistic).
- Suggestion: "Franklin worried about the car stopping, as he was terrified at the prospect of having no gas left."

12) "Ulgrin, also curious about the car stopping, unbuckles his seat belt and moves to the middle."
- Problem: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "Ulgrin, also curious about the car stopping, unbuckled his seat belt and moved to the middle."

13) "He now understands why Benjamin stopped."
- Problem: Present tense "understands" (inconsistent with surrounding past).
- Suggestion: "He now understood why Benjamin had stopped." (or "He then understood why Benjamin stopped.")

14) "Franklin persists with his worrying, and Ulgrin thought that Franklin was worrying too much."
- Problem: Tense mismatch: "persists" (present) vs "thought" (past).
- Suggestion: "Franklin persisted with his worrying, and Ulgrin thought that Franklin was worrying too much."

15) "Benjamin turns around to them and explains that they found some sort of facility."
- Problems: Present tense "turns" / "explains"; awkward "turns around to them" (stylistic).
- Suggestion: "Benjamin turned to them and explained that they had found some sort of facility."

16) "Franklin suggests that they turn around and keep driving, but Benjamin doesn’t hear him as he’s too focused on the barrier gate arm being destroyed."
- Problems: Present tense verbs; contraction "he’s".
- Suggestion: "Franklin suggested that they turn around and keep driving, but Benjamin didn't hear him as he was too focused on the barrier gate arm being destroyed."

17) "As a matter of fact, the whole place looks wrecked."
- Problem: Present tense "looks".
- Suggestion: "As a matter of fact, the whole place looked wrecked."

18) "Curiosity gets the better of him, and so he drives inside."
- Problems: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "Curiosity got the better of him, and so he drove inside."

19) "There’s a gigantic concrete wall with the words “SCP” on it."
- Problem: Present tense "There's".
- Suggestion: "There was a gigantic concrete wall with the words 'SCP' on it."

20) "The area seems to be somewhat covered in wildlife, letting them know that this facility is most likely abandoned."
- Problems: Present tense verbs; "covered in wildlife" is slightly odd (stylistic).
- Suggestion: "The area seemed to be somewhat overtaken by wildlife, letting them know that the facility was most likely abandoned." (tense change)

21) "Ulgrin suggests that they go inside the facility since there’s nothing stopping them."
- Problem: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "Ulgrin suggested that they go inside the facility since there was nothing stopping them."

22) "However, it’s two votes against one."
- Problem: Present tense "it’s".
- Suggestion: "However, it was two votes against one."

23) "As they enter, the rain becomes quieter, becoming muffled."
- Problems: Present tense verbs; wordy duplication ("becomes quieter, becoming muffled").
- Suggestion: "As they entered, the rain became quieter and more muffled." (tense change + tighten)

24) "The sounds of lights buzzing, ventilation systems, and muffled noises that sound otherworldly, all fill the air."
- Problems: Tense ("fill"); awkward list ("sounds of lights buzzing, ventilation systems" inconsistent — either list sounds or devices); unnecessary comma after "otherworldly".
- Suggestion: "The sounds of lights buzzing, ventilation systems humming, and muffled noises that sounded otherworldly all filled the air." (tense change and parallelism)

25) "Franklin continues to argue that they should leave, but neither Benjamin nor Ulgrin pay attention to him."
- Problems: Present tense "continues"; verb agreement / tense "pay" should be past "paid" (and make tense consistent).
- Suggestion: "Franklin continued to argue that they should leave, but neither Benjamin nor Ulgrin paid attention to him."

26) "They walk until they find a door on the side with an icon next to it."
- Problem: Present tense.
- Suggestion: "They walked until they found a door on the side with an icon next to it."

27) "They all walk into the room despite the broken icon."
- Problem: Present tense.
- Suggestion: "They all walked into the room despite the broken icon."

28) "After passing a multitude of doors, they’re met with a pipe releasing gas."
- Problems: Contraction "they're" (present) and awkward "a multitude of" (stylistic).
- Suggestion: "After passing many doors, they were met with a pipe releasing gas."

29) "Its franklin who approaches the pipe with caution."
- Problems: "Its" (possessive) used instead of "It's" or "It is"; "franklin" not capitalized; tense.
- Suggestion: "It was Franklin who approached the pipe with caution." or "It's Franklin" if using present—cap F.

30) "Benjamin find a paper on the floor and reads it."
- Problems: "find" (should be "finds" in present or "found" in past); tense mismatch with "reads".
- Suggestion: "Benjamin found a paper on the floor and read it." (if past)

31) "“I don’t get it. It’s just gas...”"
- Problem: Present tense used within past narrative (dialogue can be present, but surrounding verbs are past; if you keep past narration, consider reporting: He said, "I don't get it..." — optional). Not strictly a grammar error if it's dialogue, but be consistent in narrative voice.
- Note: If you want to keep direct speech, this is acceptable.

32) "The paper explains what the gas is, but he only reads the highlighted text that says “100% infectiousness. 100% lethality.”"
- Problems: Present tense; awkward phrase "100% infectiousness. 100% lethality." (stylistic; not strictly grammar)
- Suggestion: "The paper explained ... but he only read the highlighted text that said '100% infectiousness. 100% lethality.'"

33) "He shows the paper to Ulgrin and Franklin, they panic."
- Problem: Comma splice (two independent clauses joined only by a comma).
- Suggestions: Replace comma with a period or semicolon: "He showed the paper to Ulgrin and Franklin. They panicked." Also change tense to past.

34) "They only have 3 hours until franklin goes into a coma, which is considered death on the paper."
- Problems: Use of numeral "3" (style); "franklin" not capitalized; tense mismatch.
- Suggestions: "They only had three hours until Franklin went into a coma, which the paper considered death." (tense and capitalization)

35) "It’s franklin that’s practically screaming, “What are we going to do?!”"
- Problems: "It’s" present tense; "franklin" not capitalized; "that’s" should be "who's" (relative pronoun for person); punctuation of ?! is stylistic but acceptable in dialogue.
- Suggestion: "It was Franklin who was practically screaming, 'What are we going to do?!'"

36) "Benjamin continues the read the paper in hopes for something, and he does."
- Problems: "continues the read" (wrong phrase), "in hopes for something" (wrong preposition), tense.
- Suggestions: "Benjamin continued to read the paper in hopes of finding something, and he did." (or "continued reading ... in hopes of finding ...")

37) "At the bottom of the paper, it reads: “Addendum 008-1: SCP-500 has been found to be able to completely cure SCP-008 even in the advanced stages of the disease.”"
- Problems: Awkward "At the bottom of the paper, it reads:" — dangling "it". Better: "At the bottom of the paper was the line:" (stylistic, not strict grammar). If you keep it: "At the bottom of the paper, a line read: ..."
- Suggestion: "At the bottom of the paper a line read: 'Addendum ...'"

38) "Benjamin shows this to them, and they all calm down a bit."
- Problem: Present tense; comma unnecessary but not strictly wrong.
- Suggestion: "Benjamin showed this to them, and they all calmed down a bit."

39) "“ We must find this... SCP 500 thing and use it to cure Franklin. We only have 3 hours and counting to find it. Let’s go!”"
- Problems: Leading space inside quote ("“ We"); inconsistent naming (SCP 500 vs earlier SCP-500); numerals vs words; punctuation of ellipsis spacing.
- Suggestions: Remove leading space: "“We must find this... SCP-500 thing..." Change "3" → "three" if you keep style consistent.

40) "They bolt down the corridors, looking out for anything that helps them find what they need."
- Problem: Present tense.
- Suggestion: "They bolted down the corridors, looking out for anything that helped them find what they needed."

41) "Franklin begins coughing as they run down the corridors."
- Problem: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "Franklin began coughing as they ran down the corridors."

42) "They’re approaching a door when it opens by itself."
- Problem: Present tense contractions.
- Suggestion: "They were approaching a door when it opened by itself."

43) "Behind that door is a statue with an odd shape."
- Problem: Present tense.
- Suggestion: "Behind that door was a statue with an odd shape."

44) "They look at it and it doesn’t move."
- Problem: Present tense.
- Suggestion: "They looked at it and it didn't move."

45) "They back away from the door and both Ulgrin and Franklin look behind them."
- Problems: Present tense verbs.
- Suggestion: "They backed away from the door and both Ulgrin and Franklin looked behind them."

46) "Benjamin blinks and in less than a second, the statue is right in front of him."
- Problems: Present tense; comma usage after "and" (comma not needed) and tense mismatch.
- Suggestion: "Benjamin blinked, and in less than a second the statue was right in front of him."

47) "He yells to the others to keep looking at it as they go into another hallway."
- Problem: Present tense verbs and possible comma before "as" (style).
- Suggestion: "He yelled to the others to keep looking at it as they went into another hallway."

48) "They continue to run until they find a place labeled as “Light Containment Zone.”"
- Problems: Present tense; "labeled as" is awkward (not strictly wrong).
- Suggestion: "They continued to run until they found a place labeled 'Light Containment Zone.'"

49) "They figure that it might contain what they’re looking for, so they go in."
- Problems: Present tense everywhere.
- Suggestion: "They figured that it might contain what they were looking for, so they went in."

Other small recurring issues to check
- Capitalization: "franklin" appears lowercase in several places — should be "Franklin."
- Apostrophes / contractions: many present-tense contractions ("it's", "they're", "who's") are used inconsistently in a mostly past-tense narrative.
- Numbers: use consistent style: spell out numbers under ten ("five", "three") or be consistent.
- Comma splices: e.g., "He shows the paper to Ulgrin and Franklin, they panic." Replace comma with period or semicolon.
- Parallelism/list consistency: in lists of sounds (e.g., "lights buzzing, ventilation systems, and muffled noises") ensure parallel structure (all items should be sounds or devices described similarly).
- Quotation punctuation: remove stray spaces inside opening quotes and be consistent with hyphens in SCP identifiers (SCP-500 vs SCP 500).

If you want, I can:
- Produce a fully corrected version that preserves your wording as much as possible (I would make the tense consistent and fix the errors above).
- Or apply only minimal edits (change verbs to past tense and fix capitalization/comma splices) and show diffs. Which would you prefer?