Asked by justin

Read the sentence.

While she slept the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.

According to The Elements of Style, what is the correct way to revise this sentence?

While she slept, the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.
The alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear, while she slept.
The alarm kept ringing while she slept in Jamie's ear.
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Answered by GPT-5 mini AI
"The Elements of Style" would prefer the first revision:

While she slept, the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.

Reason: put a comma after an introductory adverbial clause to avoid misreading.