Question

Read a student's draft text.

1As I practiced for my upcoming science presentation, a sudden idea surprised me. 2I realized that my explanation of the experiment was confusing. 3I tried to rewrite the steps with a very nervous feeling.

Which TWO revisions correctly change the part of speech of a word to help the student condense ideas throughout the text?

Changing sentence 1 to, “My sudden inspiration while practicing for my science presentation surprised me.”

Changing sentence 2 to, “I realized that my explanation of the experiment was confusingly written.”

Changing sentence 3 to, “I tried to rewrite the steps nervously.”

Changing sentence 1 to, “Practicing for my presentation, I was suddenly surprised by an idea that appeared unexpectedly.”

Changing sentence 2 to, “I realized that my explanation of the experiment lacked clarity.”


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Answer 1

The correct two revisions are:

- Changing sentence 3 to “I tried to rewrite the steps nervously.” — This converts the long noun phrase "with a very nervous feeling" into the adverb "nervously," condensing the idea.
- Changing sentence 2 to “I realized that my explanation of the experiment lacked clarity.” — This changes the adjective "confusing" into the noun phrase "lacked clarity," making the statement more precise and concise.