Question

(18) With two family members already in college, my mother, who is a single head of household, will be financially burdened to afford me the opportunity to attend without financial aid. (19) I am hoping that a scholarship to Lewis College can help me achieve my academic goals.

(20) Sincerely,
Dee Dee Maple




This question is focused on revisions that need to be made to Dee Dee’s paper. Answer accordingly.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 18?
A
My mother who, without scholarship aid, as a single head of household has to support three children, will be financially burdened Lewis without scholarship aid.
B
My mother, who is a single head of household, will be financially burdened if she has to support three children at Lewis without scholarship aid.
C
My mother, with two family members already in college, a single head of household, will be financially burdened if I attend too without financial aid.
D
My mother being financially burdened if I attend without financial aid with two family members already in college is a single head of household.

Answer 1

B

Option B is clear, grammatical, and logically organized; it conveys that Dee Dee’s mother is a single head of household and would be financially burdened if she had to support three children at Lewis without scholarship aid.