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(7) I believe that my dedication to learning and my accomplishments in high school will be evident in my school records. (8) I also volunteer extensively in community events and Charitable organizations. (9) In fact, I hope that Lewis will have volunteer opportunities that students can join, should I be accepted into your program. (10) I am a student leader and look forward to continuing to build my leadership skills in academic and extra-curricular organizations around campus.

(11) One thing that sets me apart from other students is my pro-activeness and perserverance. (12) I am always looking ahead and preparing for future events. (13) In the end, I study ahead of time and always take advantage of down time during the week. (14) It is much more common to see me turn a project in early rather than late. (15) I also am always dedicated to not just completing tasks, but doing so successfully. (16) No matter how hard the project or obstacle, I seek out help when necessary in order to do well.

(17) I have enclosed the required financial information as stated on the application. (18) With two family members already in college, my mother, who is a single head of household, will be financially burdened to afford me the opportunity to attend without financial aid. (19) I am hoping that a scholarship to Lewis College can help me achieve my academic goals.

(20) Sincerely,
Dee Dee Maple




This question is focused on revisions that need to be made to Dee Dee’s paper. Answer accordingly.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?
A
I believe that my dedication to learning and my accomplishments in high school will be evident in my school records, I also volunteer extensively in community events and charitable organizations.
B
I believe that my dedication to learning and my accomplishments in high school will be evident in my school records, although I also volunteer extensively in community events and charitable organizations.
C
I believe that my dedication to learning, my accomplishments in high school, and my extensive volunteer work in

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C

This option creates a parallel list and avoids the comma splice in A and the awkward contrast implied by "although" in B.