Question

Point of View/Dialogue Practice: Rewrite the paragraph below and do the following:
Change third-person point of view to first-person point of view (use I & my instead of she & her)
Add at least FOUR lines of dialogue between Emily and Jack. Use the Punctuating Dialogue Handout for help using correct punctuation.

The sun had just begun to set, casting a warm golden glow over the small town. Emily walked down the cobblestone street, the scent of freshly baked bread wafting from the bakery on the corner. She popped a still-warm roll into her mouth, the buttery crust melting against her tongue. As she approached the park, children’s laughter mixed with the rustling leaves of the ancient oak trees. She could feel the cool breeze on her skin, a welcome relief from the heat of the day. Opening the creaky gate to the park, Emily saw her friend Jack jogging toward her, his face flushed from running.


Rewrite your paragraph here:

Answer 1

The sun had just begun to set, casting a warm golden glow over the small town. I walked down the cobblestone street, the scent of freshly baked bread wafting from the bakery on the corner. I popped a still-warm roll into my mouth, the buttery crust melting against my tongue. As I approached the park, children’s laughter mixed with the rustling leaves of the ancient oak trees. I could feel the cool breeze on my skin, a welcome relief from the heat of the day. Opening the creaky gate to the park, I saw my friend Jack jogging toward me, his face flushed from running.

"Hey, Em!" Jack called, slowing as he neared me. "Sorry, I didn't mean to surprise you."

"It's okay," I said, brushing crumbs from my fingers. "The bakery beat you to it — this roll is still warm."

"You always manage to find the best things," he said, grinning. "Mind if I sit?"

"Go ahead," I said, pointing to the bench beneath the oak. "You look like you ran a mile."

"Feels like it," he said, collapsing onto the bench and catching his breath. "Was worth it to see you, though."