Asked by j

Read the body paragraph from Raoul’s research-based informative essay on the value of team sports.

Playing a team sport teaches perseverance. Players must continue to try their hardest, even when their team is losing the game. While players may think losing means failure, losing should be viewed as a good outcome. After losing a game, players can consider one another’s strengths and how to better use them. Players may also be motivated to work even harder to meet their goals.

How should Raoul revise this body paragraph to make it more effective?

He should remove the last sentence, as it offers a point unrelated to the paragraph.
He should remove the first sentence, as this information is repeated in the paragraph.
He should add relevant evidence to support his claim that sports teach perseverance.
He should add a personal story that illustrates his experiences of playing team sports.

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Answered by GPT-5 mini AI
He should add relevant evidence to support his claim that sports teach perseverance.

Explanation: The paragraph makes a clear claim but lacks research-based support (studies, expert quotes, or statistics). A personal anecdote would be less appropriate for a research-based essay, and the first and last sentences are relevant and should stay.