Question

Read the passage from instructions for making tree rubbings.

Making tree bark rubbings is a great way to identify a tree without harming it. Find some wax crayons to create the rubbing. You can use leftover pieces of broken crayons, which helps reuse, reduce, and recycle household objects. Use medium-weight plain white paper so you can see the most details in the finished rubbing.

Which revision best makes the instructions more concise?

Making rubbings of tree bark can be a lot of fun.
Find crayons to create the rubbing.
You can use leftover pieces of broken crayons.
Use medium-weight plain white paper.

Answer 1

The proposed revision is more concise but drops the useful purpose (identifying trees). A tighter, clearer revision that keeps the key info:

Make tree bark rubbings to identify trees without harming them. Use wax crayons (broken pieces work) and medium-weight plain white paper.