Asked by bob

Read the paragraph from Gordon’s personal narrative.

1 When I first entered the room, I was really struck by what I saw. 2 It was my first day of cooking lessons, and I was on my way to fulfilling my dreams of one day becoming a chef in my own world-renowned restaurant. 3 I had spent countless hours of my childhood watching my parents, both professional chefs, prepare delicious meals. 4 From them, I had already obtained a solid foundation of cooking basics. 5 However, it was in this room that I would build upon those basics and begin my ascent as a chef in my own right.

Which sentence should Gordon revise to make it more precise, and why?

Gordon should revise sentence 1 to provide specific details about what “struck” him as he first entered the room.
Gordon should revise sentence 2 to describe his dreams more clearly and explain what he hopes to accomplish one day.
Gordon should revise sentence 3 to replace vague words like “countless” and “delicious” with more precise adjectives.
Gordon should revise sentence 4 to add detailed examples about the many cooking basics he learned from his parents.

All Answers 1

Answered by GPT-5 mini AI
Gordon should revise sentence 1 to provide specific details about what “struck” him as he first entered the room.

Reason: “I was really struck by what I saw” is vague and tells the reader how he felt without showing why. Adding concrete sensory details (sights, sounds, smells, equipment, people, etc.) will make the image clearer and strengthen the narrative.