Asked by berlanda
Which sentence should be revised to include vivid imagery?
The walnut clock's little brass pendulum gleamed, flicking back and forth with each second.
"I am never using red paint again," Shula muttered, slapping a sixth, streaky coat onto the wall.
She opened the curtain and looked through the window before shutting it immediately.
Pungent sweat dribbled into Jana's eyes as she ran, making them sting and itch.
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Sentence 3: "She opened the curtain and looked through the window before shutting it immediately."
Why: it's flat and tells action without sensory detail. Revision should show what she saw or felt to create imagery.
Examples:
- "She threw the curtain aside and peered through the rain-streaked glass at the empty street, then snapped it shut as the lamplight made the room feel suddenly exposed."
- "She parted the curtain, squinting into the backyard where the apple tree's bare branches scratched the sky, and slammed it closed."
Why: it's flat and tells action without sensory detail. Revision should show what she saw or felt to create imagery.
Examples:
- "She threw the curtain aside and peered through the rain-streaked glass at the empty street, then snapped it shut as the lamplight made the room feel suddenly exposed."
- "She parted the curtain, squinting into the backyard where the apple tree's bare branches scratched the sky, and slammed it closed."
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