Question

It was a hot dry day last august when I realized that I was tired of Summer. On that day I came to the conclusion that Summer days were too warm, too long and too sunny. I decided to get in my car and drive North to the mountains for some cool air which I love and shady trees. It was the best decision I made all Summer.

Write three to five sentences explaining what should be done to edit this paragraph for errors.

Answer 1

Fix capitalization and punctuation: capitalize "August," but use lowercase "summer" and lowercase "north" (unless they are being used as proper nouns), add a comma between coordinate adjectives ("hot, dry") and after the introductory phrase ("On that day, ..."), and consider the Oxford comma in the list ("too warm, too long, and too sunny"). Change "get in my car" to "get into my car." Rework the awkward clause "for some cool air which I love and shady trees" by adding commas or rephrasing (for example, "for cool air and shady trees, which I love," or "for some cool air, which I love, and shady trees"). Finally, tighten repetitive wording and remove unnecessary words like "that" for smoother flow (e.g., "It was a hot, dry day last August when I realized I was tired of summer.").