Question

In an evaluation based on clarity, which sentence would receive the lowest score due to unclear language?

Ward: This instruction applies to forward pedaling only; for back pedaling or backing, the movement should be reversed.
Ward: The handle-bar conveys two principal movements to the first wheel—a short wiggling movement and a long or steering sweep.
Korns: An erect position, steady on the saddle, but when all is done, the crowning grace is that of apparent ease.
Korns: You may commence with the saddle a little low, but do not use it this way long enough to allow yourself to become fixed in a bad habit.

Answer 1

Ward: "The handle-bar conveys two principal movements to the first wheel—a short wiggling movement and a long or steering sweep."

Reason: phrases like "conveys to the first wheel," "first wheel," and "short wiggling movement" are vague or archaic, making the intended mechanical action unclear. A clearer phrasing would state the specific parts and motions (e.g., "The handlebars produce two main motions in the front wheel: a quick oscillation and a broader steering sweep.").