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While she slept the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.

According to The Elements of Style, what is the correct way to revise this sentence?

While she slept, the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.
The alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear, while she slept.
The alarm kept ringing while she slept in Jamie's ear.
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While she slept, the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.

Reason: Strunk & White recommends a comma after an introductory subordinate clause. (If you want to avoid the awkward use of both "she" and "Jamie," better still: "While Jamie slept, the alarm kept ringing in her ear.")