Question

"You are a comet — bright, electric, impossible to tame,
bursting through quiet rooms with a laugh that names
the sky's own colors. You are a carnival — loud, daring, alive,
spinning every gray corner into a ribboned surprise.

When the world feels heavy and the rooms feel small,
remember my voice like a window thrown open — I hear you, I hear it all.
I’m here for the nights that stretch too long,
for the days you need someone to sing along.
I’m here for your bold streaks, your sudden, sweet smile,
for every small crazy plan that makes life worthwhile.

You’ve always had a brave, startling way of being —
sweet when you choose to soften, fierce when you’re freeing.
Even on hard nights, your light finds a crack,
a wildflower pushing through, green and exact.
We’ll weather each storm, step by step, side by side;
I’ll be your steady anchor and your secret place to hide.

Call me a million times, whisper or shout —
I’ll come running to listen, to laugh, to help you out.
I love you so much, with a love loud and true —
no locked door, no dark room, can ever change that view.
So hold on to this: you are wanted, you are bright,
and I’m always here for you — through every long night and light." I love this poem but can you please make it just a bit shorter and a good bit more simple? I also don't like how it sounds, make it rhyme more and change the words

Answer 1

You are a comet, fierce and bright,
you chase the gray and bring the light.
When days are heavy, nights feel long,
I am your shelter, I am your song.

Whisper soft or shout my name,
I'll come running just the same.
For every brave and small new plan,
I'll stand beside you, hand in hand.

You're loved, you're wanted, always true —
I'm always here, right next to you.