Question

Read the following paragraph.

The advertisement targets parents who could easily associate the children in the picture with their own children. In the ad, a mother and father are reading a book to their two young children. This has a positive connotation of intimacy and love. The image implies that reading is not just intellectually beneficial, but that it creates a closer bond between parents and their children. Because of this association technique, parents are persuaded to read to their children. Most parents certainly would want their children to do well academically and feel loved at the same time. Therefore, this ad effectively encourages literacy.

Which of the following revisions will most likely improve this paragraph?
the addition of a stronger topic sentence
the inclusion of the ad’s purpose
the determination of the ad’s target audience
the evaluation of the ad’s technique

Answer 1

the addition of a stronger topic sentence

The paragraph states details and evaluates the technique, and it already identifies the audience and purpose, but it lacks a clear, unified opening statement that presents the paragraph’s main claim. A stronger topic sentence would improve clarity and coherence.