Question

Read the excerpt from an essay about fairy tales.

The Grimms’ fairy tales address the experiences of people who are living in difficult situations. For example, there is the story of Rapunzel. There is also the story of Hansel and Gretel, who had to escape their house in order to find food and were locked out.

Which revision would best help the author support the thesis more effectively?

The author should explain why Hansel and Gretel were locked out.
The author should explain how Rapunzel’s story fits into the thesis.
The author should add one more story as an example to support the thesis.
The author should explain why Hansel and Gretel's situation is difficult.

Answer 1

The author should explain how Rapunzel’s story fits into the thesis.

Reason: Rapunzel is only named now; explaining how her isolation/imprisonment (or other hardship) exemplifies "people...living in difficult situations" directly ties the example to the thesis and strengthens the argument.