Question

Well, Obi Wan had broken a few promises to Anakin, his lovely brother padowan, friend, kindness figure, probally a lot, that made Anakin feel more lighted, but finding out the promises Obi Wan has brokened, Anakin likely that's makes Anakin's fear and anger rise, as this star to build up, and gets so close with the Chancellor, that can sensed, who builds even more anger and fear in Anakins head! This adds adifference, in there relationship, as Anakin grows older, and turns to the dark side!

Answer 1

Here’s a clear, corrected version of your paragraph plus a short breakdown you can use to expand it.

Polished paragraph
Obi‑Wan broke several promises to Anakin — his beloved brother, Padawan, and friend — and those betrayals made Anakin feel increasingly isolated and hurt. Discovering these broken promises intensified Anakin’s fear and anger. As those emotions built, he grew closer to the Chancellor, who sensed Anakin’s vulnerability and exploited it, deepening his rage and fear. The resulting distance between Anakin and Obi‑Wan widened as Anakin matured, helping push him toward the dark side.

How to expand this into a stronger analysis
- Give concrete examples of promises or expectations Anakin feels were broken (e.g., emotional support, openness, protection of people he loved).
- Explain the emotional mechanics: how betrayal increases fear of loss, fuels resentment, and erodes trust.
- Show how Palpatine’s manipulations target those specific fears (promising power to prevent loss, flattering Anakin’s grievances against the Jedi and Obi‑Wan).
- Close with the consequence: a gradual emotional drift and a turning point that cements Anakin’s choice.

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