So I am writing about how I agree with this one critic that Hawthorne over used symbolism in the book the Scarlet Letter.

Question

My thesis:
He stressed the sin by stretching the idea and making it seem like it is a mystical character itself, and allowing it to be able to physically harm and hinder the other main characters in the book.

do you think it is good?
thanks:)

Answer 1

I'd do the following:

-- replace "He" with "Hawthorne"
-- clarify "the idea" and "it" (in all places)
-- replace "like" with "as if"

Once you make these corrections, please repost, and then someone here will be able to tell you more.

Answer 2

ok thanks

New Thesis:

Hawthorne stressed the sin by stretching the idea of sin and making the letter A seem as if it is a mystical character itself, and allowing the letter(sounds a little weird, should I put "sin" instead?) to be able to physically harm and hinder the other main characters in the book.

Answer 3

How's this:

Hawthorne stressed the sin by stretching the idea of sin, making the letter A seem as if it is a mystical character itself, and allowing the letter to be able to physically harm and hinder the other main characters in the book.

I made your series parallel ("by stretching... making ... allowing..."), but other than that it needs no other corrections.

I think it's a good thesis and should lead to a good, interesting paper.

Answer 4

ok thanks:)it great

Answer 5

YW!!