Question
Use the story to answer the questions.
in 3-5 sentences, describe changes you could make to the dream subplot that would increase tension, mystery, or surprise in the story.
It is clear to me that Henry and Eva are skilled, compassionate, and experienced caregivers who calmly lead the survivors to safety. By demonstrating their command of the vessel ("Henry calls out, 'Parry Sound,'" and "Henry and Eva set to work dousing the sails.... Henry and Eva fold the sails and get out oars," respectively), the passage demonstrates their nautical prowess and composed leadership. By watching out for the narrator's health, Eva prevents her from exerting herself too much ("she points to the bottom of the boat." I should sit"), and the narrator expresses gratitude to them inwardly for their helpfulness and compassion ("Thank you, Eva, for your berries and your kindness." They demonstrated helpfulness and compassion by saying things like, "Thank you, Henry, for keeping us safe when there was no one else."
It is clear to me that Henry and Eva are skilled, compassionate, and experienced caregivers who calmly lead the survivors to safety. By demonstrating their command of the vessel ("Henry calls out, 'Parry Sound,'" and "Henry and Eva set to work dousing the sails.... Henry and Eva fold the sails and get out oars," respectively), the passage demonstrates their nautical prowess and composed leadership. By watching out for the narrator's health, Eva prevents her from exerting herself too much ("she points to the bottom of the boat." I should sit"), and the narrator expresses gratitude to them inwardly for their helpfulness and compassion ("Thank you, Eva, for your berries and your kindness." They demonstrated helpfulness and compassion by saying things like, "Thank you, Henry, for keeping us safe when there was no one else."
in 3-5 sentences, describe changes you could make to the dream subplot that would increase tension, mystery, or surprise in the story.
It is clear to me that Henry and Eva are skilled, compassionate, and experienced caregivers who calmly lead the survivors to safety. By demonstrating their command of the vessel ("Henry calls out, 'Parry Sound,'" and "Henry and Eva set to work dousing the sails.... Henry and Eva fold the sails and get out oars," respectively), the passage demonstrates their nautical prowess and composed leadership. By watching out for the narrator's health, Eva prevents her from exerting herself too much ("she points to the bottom of the boat." I should sit"), and the narrator expresses gratitude to them inwardly for their helpfulness and compassion ("Thank you, Eva, for your berries and your kindness." They demonstrated helpfulness and compassion by saying things like, "Thank you, Henry, for keeping us safe when there was no one else."
It is clear to me that Henry and Eva are skilled, compassionate, and experienced caregivers who calmly lead the survivors to safety. By demonstrating their command of the vessel ("Henry calls out, 'Parry Sound,'" and "Henry and Eva set to work dousing the sails.... Henry and Eva fold the sails and get out oars," respectively), the passage demonstrates their nautical prowess and composed leadership. By watching out for the narrator's health, Eva prevents her from exerting herself too much ("she points to the bottom of the boat." I should sit"), and the narrator expresses gratitude to them inwardly for their helpfulness and compassion ("Thank you, Eva, for your berries and your kindness." They demonstrated helpfulness and compassion by saying things like, "Thank you, Henry, for keeping us safe when there was no one else."
Answers
GPT-5 mini
Make the narrator’s dreams more frequent and sensory so they bleed into waking scenes—smoke, the echo of someone calling “Parry Sound,” or the feel of water under the boat—so readers can’t tell when the dream ends and reality begins. Introduce contradictory dream-versions of Henry and Eva (one dream shows Eva giving poisonous berries, another shows Henry abandoning the oars) to seed doubt about who can be trusted. Have a small, uncanny detail from a dream—a knot tied a certain way, a single black berry—appear later in waking life, creating a chilling, surprising link that forces characters to reassess past events. Finally, let a dream reveal a precise, impossible fact (a name or a location) that no one could know, raising mystery about whether the dream is prophetic, planted, or a symptom of the narrator’s trauma.