Question
MAKE THE FINAL DRAFT OF THIS, FOR 10TH GRADE
BEGINNING
The idea of having big muscles and being really strong was always inside me. The idea of eating more fruits and vegetables while incorporating daily exercise sounded appealing. However, I struggled with a significant hurdle: my lack of self-discipline. Fruits and vegetables were never my preferred choices; in fact, I often found them unappetizing compared to my usual fare.
One evening, I decided it was time to come clean about my struggles. I sat down with my parents and opened up about my desire to lead a healthier lifestyle. Their supportive reactions inspired me, but they encouraged me to set small, achievable goals and remind me that the journey towards better health was not something I had to handle alone.
MIDDLE
With my parents’ encouragement, I created a plan and schedule to help me achieve my health goals. However, the first few weeks were challenging. Each day felt like an uphill battle against my own cravings, and there were moments I longed to give up.But as time passed, I began to notice significant changes. My body started to feel stronger; I was able to push through workouts. I once thought it was beyond my capacity. Sleep came easier to me, and I woke up feeling revitalized and ready to tackle the day. Each small victory felt like a step toward the person I aspired to be, and gradually, I started to feel good about myself.
With this increased sense of accomplishment, I found myself developing greater self-discipline. I began to look forward to my workouts and even found joy in discovering new healthy recipes. I could feel my mindset shifting; I wasn't just going through the motions—I was actively participating in my journey toward better health.
END
Fast forward a few months, and I achieved even more than I thought possible. I had grown stronger, lost weight, and most importantly, I felt an immense boost in my self-esteem. I realized that motivation had sparked the initial fire within me to embark on this journey, but it was self-discipline that kept that fire alive. Motivation can help you take that first step, but it is through consistency and perseverance that true transformation occurs. I had discovered a healthier version of myself, not just physically but mentally and emotionally too. I discovered the best version of myself, a version I was proud to be.
BEGINNING
The idea of having big muscles and being really strong was always inside me. The idea of eating more fruits and vegetables while incorporating daily exercise sounded appealing. However, I struggled with a significant hurdle: my lack of self-discipline. Fruits and vegetables were never my preferred choices; in fact, I often found them unappetizing compared to my usual fare.
One evening, I decided it was time to come clean about my struggles. I sat down with my parents and opened up about my desire to lead a healthier lifestyle. Their supportive reactions inspired me, but they encouraged me to set small, achievable goals and remind me that the journey towards better health was not something I had to handle alone.
MIDDLE
With my parents’ encouragement, I created a plan and schedule to help me achieve my health goals. However, the first few weeks were challenging. Each day felt like an uphill battle against my own cravings, and there were moments I longed to give up.But as time passed, I began to notice significant changes. My body started to feel stronger; I was able to push through workouts. I once thought it was beyond my capacity. Sleep came easier to me, and I woke up feeling revitalized and ready to tackle the day. Each small victory felt like a step toward the person I aspired to be, and gradually, I started to feel good about myself.
With this increased sense of accomplishment, I found myself developing greater self-discipline. I began to look forward to my workouts and even found joy in discovering new healthy recipes. I could feel my mindset shifting; I wasn't just going through the motions—I was actively participating in my journey toward better health.
END
Fast forward a few months, and I achieved even more than I thought possible. I had grown stronger, lost weight, and most importantly, I felt an immense boost in my self-esteem. I realized that motivation had sparked the initial fire within me to embark on this journey, but it was self-discipline that kept that fire alive. Motivation can help you take that first step, but it is through consistency and perseverance that true transformation occurs. I had discovered a healthier version of myself, not just physically but mentally and emotionally too. I discovered the best version of myself, a version I was proud to be.
Answers
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### Final Draft
**Beginning**
The desire to have big muscles and be strong had always been a part of me. The thought of eating more fruits and vegetables and incorporating daily exercise intrigued me. However, I faced a significant challenge: my lack of self-discipline. I never considered fruits and vegetables appetizing; they paled in comparison to my usual junk food.
One evening, I knew it was time to confront my struggles. I sat down with my parents and opened up about my wish to lead a healthier lifestyle. Their supportive responses motivated me, and they encouraged me to establish small, achievable goals. They reassured me that I didn’t have to navigate this journey alone.
**Middle**
With my parents’ encouragement, I developed a plan and schedule to help me reach my health goals. The first few weeks were tough, though. Each day felt like an uphill battle against my cravings, and there were times when I wanted to give up. But as time went on, I began to notice significant changes. My body started to feel stronger, and I pushed through workouts I once thought were impossible. Sleep came easier, and I woke up feeling refreshed and ready to tackle the day. Each small victory felt like a step toward the person I wished to become, and gradually, my self-esteem began to grow.
As I enjoyed my accomplishments, my self-discipline also improved. I looked forward to my workouts and discovered joy in trying new healthy recipes. My mindset shifted; I wasn’t merely going through the motions—I was actively engaging in my journey toward better health.
**End**
Fast forward a few months, and I achieved even more than I believed possible. I grew stronger, lost weight, and most importantly, my self-esteem soared. I realized that while motivation sparked the initial fire to start this journey, it was self-discipline that kept that fire alive. Motivation can help you take the first step, but true transformation comes from consistency and perseverance. I found a healthier version of myself—physically, mentally, and emotionally. I discovered a version of me that I was proud to be.
**Beginning**
The desire to have big muscles and be strong had always been a part of me. The thought of eating more fruits and vegetables and incorporating daily exercise intrigued me. However, I faced a significant challenge: my lack of self-discipline. I never considered fruits and vegetables appetizing; they paled in comparison to my usual junk food.
One evening, I knew it was time to confront my struggles. I sat down with my parents and opened up about my wish to lead a healthier lifestyle. Their supportive responses motivated me, and they encouraged me to establish small, achievable goals. They reassured me that I didn’t have to navigate this journey alone.
**Middle**
With my parents’ encouragement, I developed a plan and schedule to help me reach my health goals. The first few weeks were tough, though. Each day felt like an uphill battle against my cravings, and there were times when I wanted to give up. But as time went on, I began to notice significant changes. My body started to feel stronger, and I pushed through workouts I once thought were impossible. Sleep came easier, and I woke up feeling refreshed and ready to tackle the day. Each small victory felt like a step toward the person I wished to become, and gradually, my self-esteem began to grow.
As I enjoyed my accomplishments, my self-discipline also improved. I looked forward to my workouts and discovered joy in trying new healthy recipes. My mindset shifted; I wasn’t merely going through the motions—I was actively engaging in my journey toward better health.
**End**
Fast forward a few months, and I achieved even more than I believed possible. I grew stronger, lost weight, and most importantly, my self-esteem soared. I realized that while motivation sparked the initial fire to start this journey, it was self-discipline that kept that fire alive. Motivation can help you take the first step, but true transformation comes from consistency and perseverance. I found a healthier version of myself—physically, mentally, and emotionally. I discovered a version of me that I was proud to be.