Did you ever follow somebody else's wrong and or right action and regret it?Here is the story of how I followed somebody's action and regretted it.

It was a scorching hot summer day, all trace and sight of the cold was left behind.The air felt like I was in a sauna!My funky brothers were out with me , all you heard was sweaty football catching and basketball hoop swishing , and for me I was on my black and green busted up skate board.

My brother thought he had the world's best idea ever to tie me up to his brand new and improved black and red camouflaged bike.In the hot ground street we went,he started pushing the bike with his crusty crocs that could barely fit him, they were leaning to the side.We went slow in the streets at first,then we stopped by the ever lasting dollar general close bye.We came back from the store we got on the sidewalk.

BOOM,and so I went .He bumped into a light post ,he fell, but I slid across the sidewalk.I thought it was my last day on earth.The hot ground below me scolded me as my guilty brother yelled my moms name for help.She came out sweaty and worried in a workout set to the sidewalk where people surrounded me.”What happened to you?” In an angry matter she said.I was in pain, voice trembling, couldn't get my mind together. I was in shock so I didn't say anything.They finally got me up ,when i was up people were asking if I was ok.

It was a traumaful day and I would never forget it .Now i would never ride a skate board again.
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The Day I Regretted Following My Brother

It all started on one of those super hot summer days where the sun felt like it was on a mission to fry everything in its path. You know, the kind of day where even the clouds seem to be avoiding you? My brothers and I were outside, trying to make the most of the sweltering heat. The sound of basketballs bouncing and the thud of footballs being caught echoed around our driveway. I was eager to join in the fun, so I hopped on my black and green skateboard that was older than me and had seen better days.

As I rolled around, my older brother came up with what he thought was the "best idea ever." He wanted to tie me to his brand new black and red bike and tow me around like I was some sort of super cool skateboard dog. “It’ll be so much fun! You’ll see!” he said, his eyes sparkling with excitement. Little did I know, following his lead would turn out to be one of my biggest regrets.

At first, it seemed like a great idea. We started slowly in the street, which was baking under the summer sun. My brother was wearing his crusty crocs that looked like they had survived a zombie apocalypse. They were leaning to the side, making it even funnier to watch him walk. But as we picked up speed, I started to feel nervous. My stomach flipped as we rolled faster and faster. I could hear the wind whooshing past my ears, and it felt thrilling for a moment.

We decided to make a pit stop at the nearby Dollar General. It was nice to cool off a little in the air-conditioned store while we picked out chips and sodas. I felt like a pro riding my skateboard while my brother bike-towed me outside. But my excitement faded when we got back to the sidewalk, and he started to speed up again.

Suddenly, BOOM! Out of nowhere, my brother accidentally bumped into a light post. In that split second, everything went wrong. I lost my balance, and before I knew it, I was flying off the side of my skateboard and sliding across the hot, scalding sidewalk. I could feel the heat burning my skin, and fear coursed through my veins as I thought, “This is it! This is how it ends for me!”

Amidst the chaos, I could hear my brother shouting my mom’s name. It felt like the world was moving in slow motion. I hit the ground hard, and the pain shot through my body like fireworks. Just then, I saw a blur of my mom rushing out of the house in her workout clothes, looking worried. “What happened to you?” she yelled, panic in her voice as people gathered around to see what was going on.

I was in shock, trembling with pain, my mind racing but not knowing what to say. All I could think was that my skateboarding adventures would never be the same again. When they finally helped me up, my legs felt like jelly, and I could feel the audience of onlookers watching me with concern.

That day ended up being traumatic, and I learned a painful lesson. I realized that sometimes, following someone else's crazy ideas might not lead to fun; it can lead to a lot of regret and injury. From that moment on, I promised myself I would stick to my own ideas instead of blindly following my brother's. Now, every time I see my skateboard, I remember that scorching hot day and the lesson I learned about thinking for myself. I think I’ll stick to playing basketball instead!