Question
TASK 3- Use the Editing check list to edit the piece of writing below
Spelling
Have I checked that tricky words are spelled right?
Did I sound out the word if I wasn’t sure?
Have I used a dictionary or spell-check to help me?
Did I mix up they’re / their / there?
Did I confuse your / you’re?
Grammar
Did I start every sentence with a capital letter?
Did I use a full stop (.) at the end of each sentence?
Are names and places starting with a capital letter?
Did I keep the same tense (past, present, or future) all the way through?
Did I write "I” with a capital letter, not “i”?
Did I check that a and an are used correctly (e.g. a cat, an apple)?
Sentences/syntax
Do my sentences make sense when I read them out loud?
Did I avoid writing run-on sentences (sentences that are too long or have no punctuation)?
Did I use joining words like and, but, because, so to link ideas?
Did I check that each sentence has a subject (who) and a verb (action)?
Are my ideas in the right order?
Final check
Have you read you work out loud to make sure it flows and makes sense?
Have you let someone else read your work?
Edit this piece of writing.
Once upon a time, there was a little boy named Tom. He loved exploring. One day, he went to the enchanted wood near his house. The wood was full of tall trees, singing birds, and sparkling lights. Tom walked deeper and deeper into the wood because he wanted to find the magic pond he had heard about.
As he walked, he didn't notice that the sun was setting. Suddenly, Tom realized he was lost. He looked around and saw strange glowing mushrooms and whispering leaves. He tried to find his way back but he couldn't remember the path he came from. "Oh no, what should I do now?" Tom thought.
Just then, a small fox appeared. The fox said, "Follow me, I know the way out of here." Tom was surprised that the fox could talk but he decided to trust the fox because he was scared. They walked together, but the path was twisty and long.
Along the way, Tom saw a tree with eyes! It blinked at him and said, "You’re braver than you think." Tom smiled and felt a little better. After some time, the fox stopped and said, "Here we are, the edge of the wood." Tom looked and saw his home just beyond the trees.
Tom thanked the fox and ran home. He told his parents about the enchanted wood and the talking fox. They were happy he was safe but reminded him to be careful next time. From that day, Tom never went into the woods alone again.
Spelling
Have I checked that tricky words are spelled right?
Did I sound out the word if I wasn’t sure?
Have I used a dictionary or spell-check to help me?
Did I mix up they’re / their / there?
Did I confuse your / you’re?
Grammar
Did I start every sentence with a capital letter?
Did I use a full stop (.) at the end of each sentence?
Are names and places starting with a capital letter?
Did I keep the same tense (past, present, or future) all the way through?
Did I write "I” with a capital letter, not “i”?
Did I check that a and an are used correctly (e.g. a cat, an apple)?
Sentences/syntax
Do my sentences make sense when I read them out loud?
Did I avoid writing run-on sentences (sentences that are too long or have no punctuation)?
Did I use joining words like and, but, because, so to link ideas?
Did I check that each sentence has a subject (who) and a verb (action)?
Are my ideas in the right order?
Final check
Have you read you work out loud to make sure it flows and makes sense?
Have you let someone else read your work?
Edit this piece of writing.
Once upon a time, there was a little boy named Tom. He loved exploring. One day, he went to the enchanted wood near his house. The wood was full of tall trees, singing birds, and sparkling lights. Tom walked deeper and deeper into the wood because he wanted to find the magic pond he had heard about.
As he walked, he didn't notice that the sun was setting. Suddenly, Tom realized he was lost. He looked around and saw strange glowing mushrooms and whispering leaves. He tried to find his way back but he couldn't remember the path he came from. "Oh no, what should I do now?" Tom thought.
Just then, a small fox appeared. The fox said, "Follow me, I know the way out of here." Tom was surprised that the fox could talk but he decided to trust the fox because he was scared. They walked together, but the path was twisty and long.
Along the way, Tom saw a tree with eyes! It blinked at him and said, "You’re braver than you think." Tom smiled and felt a little better. After some time, the fox stopped and said, "Here we are, the edge of the wood." Tom looked and saw his home just beyond the trees.
Tom thanked the fox and ran home. He told his parents about the enchanted wood and the talking fox. They were happy he was safe but reminded him to be careful next time. From that day, Tom never went into the woods alone again.
Answers
GPT-4o mini
Here's the edited piece of writing with corrections and improvements based on the checklist:
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Once upon a time, there was a little boy named Tom. He loved exploring. One day, he went to the enchanted wood near his house. The wood was full of tall trees, singing birds, and sparkling lights. Tom walked deeper and deeper into the wood because he wanted to find the magic pond he had heard about.
As he walked, he didn't notice that the sun was setting. Suddenly, Tom realized he was lost. He looked around and saw strange glowing mushrooms and whispering leaves. He tried to find his way back, but he couldn't remember the path he had come from. "Oh no, what should I do now?" Tom thought.
Just then, a small fox appeared. The fox said, "Follow me, I know the way out of here." Tom was surprised that the fox could talk, but he decided to trust the fox because he was scared. They walked together, but the path was twisty and long.
Along the way, Tom saw a tree with eyes! It blinked at him and said, "You’re braver than you think." Tom smiled and felt a little better. After some time, the fox stopped and said, "Here we are, the edge of the wood." Tom looked and saw his home just beyond the trees.
Tom thanked the fox and ran home. He told his parents about the enchanted wood and the talking fox. They were happy he was safe but reminded him to be careful next time. From that day on, Tom never went into the woods alone again.
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**Changes Made:**
1. **Grammar:**
- Added a comma before "but" in the sentence: "He tried to find his way back, but he couldn't remember the path he had come from."
- Added a comma before "but" in the sentence: "Tom was surprised that the fox could talk, but he decided to trust the fox..."
2. **Word Choice & Clarity:**
- Changed "From that day" to "From that day on" for better clarity.
3. **Sentence Structure:**
- The original sentences were generally well-constructed, so only minimal adjustments were made for clarity and flow.
4. **Spelling:**
- Double-checked words and found none that needed correction.
5. **Miscellaneous:**
- Verified consistent use of tense, capitalization, and punctuation throughout the piece.
This edited version should be clearer and more fluid while maintaining the original storyline and intent.
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Once upon a time, there was a little boy named Tom. He loved exploring. One day, he went to the enchanted wood near his house. The wood was full of tall trees, singing birds, and sparkling lights. Tom walked deeper and deeper into the wood because he wanted to find the magic pond he had heard about.
As he walked, he didn't notice that the sun was setting. Suddenly, Tom realized he was lost. He looked around and saw strange glowing mushrooms and whispering leaves. He tried to find his way back, but he couldn't remember the path he had come from. "Oh no, what should I do now?" Tom thought.
Just then, a small fox appeared. The fox said, "Follow me, I know the way out of here." Tom was surprised that the fox could talk, but he decided to trust the fox because he was scared. They walked together, but the path was twisty and long.
Along the way, Tom saw a tree with eyes! It blinked at him and said, "You’re braver than you think." Tom smiled and felt a little better. After some time, the fox stopped and said, "Here we are, the edge of the wood." Tom looked and saw his home just beyond the trees.
Tom thanked the fox and ran home. He told his parents about the enchanted wood and the talking fox. They were happy he was safe but reminded him to be careful next time. From that day on, Tom never went into the woods alone again.
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**Changes Made:**
1. **Grammar:**
- Added a comma before "but" in the sentence: "He tried to find his way back, but he couldn't remember the path he had come from."
- Added a comma before "but" in the sentence: "Tom was surprised that the fox could talk, but he decided to trust the fox..."
2. **Word Choice & Clarity:**
- Changed "From that day" to "From that day on" for better clarity.
3. **Sentence Structure:**
- The original sentences were generally well-constructed, so only minimal adjustments were made for clarity and flow.
4. **Spelling:**
- Double-checked words and found none that needed correction.
5. **Miscellaneous:**
- Verified consistent use of tense, capitalization, and punctuation throughout the piece.
This edited version should be clearer and more fluid while maintaining the original storyline and intent.