This is a litte story i'm writing can you help fix any Grammar mistakes please

"As the world settled down and the stars blinked awake, a small girl named Emery closed her eyes, ready for a night of dreams. Suddenly, she felt herself lift off the ground and float, float, floating on the softest cloud. With each bounce, she found herself entering the sky, painted with shades of lavender and gentle pinks as the sun, but also thousands and big fluffy soft clouds that surrounded the sky.

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Your story has a lovely whimsical quality! Here are a few suggestions for grammar and clarity:

"As the world settled down and the stars blinked awake, a small girl named Emery closed her eyes, ready for a night of dreams. Suddenly, she felt herself lift off the ground and float—float—floating on the softest cloud. With each bounce, she found herself rising into the sky, painted with shades of lavender and gentle pink, illuminated by the sun and surrounded by thousands of big, fluffy clouds."

Let me know if you need any further assistance!