Your letter is clear, but there are a few ways to improve its tone, structure, and clarity. Here’s a revised version:
Subject: Request for Review of Cultural Literacy Unit Test Score
Dear Mrs. Callie,
I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to discuss my score on the Cultural Literacy Unit Test, specifically regarding question 5.
In that question, I chose the answer, "They believed the Great Spirit was responsible for their well-being," which I felt was supported by the text. While the story does mention warriors in a specific context, it does not clearly state whether women served as warriors, which is the key point of the correct answer: "Women served as warriors as well as farmers."
I understand and respect your assessment, but I would sincerely appreciate it if you could consider my reasoning. I strive to understand the material fully and ensure that my interpretations align with the text.
If possible, I would be grateful for the opportunity to earn that point back. Thank you for considering my request.
Best regards,
[Your Name]
[Your Class/Section]
This version is more structured and courteous, making it a bit more likely to elicit a positive response.