Write a dialogue in which each of the two characters has a secret. Do not reveal the secret but make the reader intuit it. . Purpose: to give two characters individual ways of speaking, and to make dialogue crackle with feelings not directly expressed. Remember that in dialogue, as a general rule, every pause must somehow be shown, either by narration (for example, "she paused") or by some gesture or other break that shows the pause. And remember that gesture is a part of all real dialogue. Sometimes, for instance, we look away instead of answering. Tell me the secrets beforehand, but don't include it in the dialogue, and don't make it about travelling

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Secrets:

  • Ava: She is secretly in love with her best friend, Max, but feels that revealing her feelings would jeopardize their friendship.

  • Max: He is hiding the fact that he’s been offered a job in another city, and he hasn’t yet decided whether to take it or not. He fears that it might change everything between him and Ava.


Dialogue:

Setting: A cozy coffee shop, rain tapping softly against the window. Ava and Max sit across from each other, steaming mugs in hand. Ava fiddles with her cup, glancing up at Max, who stares out into the rain.

Ava: (biting her lip) So, um… how did that meeting go today? The one with your boss?

Max shifts in his seat, then finally tears his gaze away from the window. He forces a casual smile.

Max: Oh, you know how it is. Just the usual... “looking for ways to boost productivity.” (He chuckles, but it doesn’t quite reach his eyes.) How about you? How’s work treating you?

Ava’s fingers tighten around the cup, her smile faltering for a brief moment.

Ava: (clearing her throat) It’s... fine. Busy, you know? But it’s nice to have something to distract me. (She glances away, and her voice softens.) I’ve been thinking about... moving forward with some projects.

Max leans in a little, intrigued, but the momentary connection breaks as he leans back, avoiding her gaze.

Max: (nervously) Projects? Right. Yeah, those can be, uh, exciting. (He rubs the back of his neck, then shifts topics.) I’ve been thinking about… options too—like, what’s next, you know? Where to go from here?

A heavy pause hangs between them, and Ava’s heart races. She hesitates before speaking, weighing her words.

Ava: (tentatively) Options can be good... But change can be... unnerving. (She looks down, tracing patterns on the table.) Sometimes, I wonder if we should just hold onto what we have.

Max’s expression clouds for a moment, and he shifts uncomfortably in his chair.

Max: (voice tight) Yeah, sometimes holding on feels... safer. But what if it’s not always the best choice? (He bites his lip, trying to mask his uncertainty with humor.) Besides, more choices mean more adventures, right?

Ava’s eyes dart to his, catching the flicker of something unspoken.

Ava: (softly) Adventures are great... but what if they take you away from everything you know? (She exhales, searching his face.) Like, what if you’re forced to choose between what you want... and what you need?

Max’s brow furrows, and he leans forward slightly, his voice dropping to a whisper.

Max: (earnestly) Sometimes what you need isn’t what you want. (He fidgets with the edge of the table.) I mean, maybe it’s better to stay where it’s familiar… unless you think something has to change.

A growing tension crackles between them, Ava biting her lip as she searches for the right words, and Max suddenly looking like he wants to escape.

Ava: (breathlessly) Max, I—

But she stops herself, swallowing hard. He looks ready to say something, but then his eyes flicker away, and he changes the subject yet again.

Max: (forced lightness) So, did you hear about that new café opening on Maple Street? Supposed to have the best pastries in town.

Ava’s heart sinks, realizing he’s dodging the real conversation. She forces a smile, even as a bittersweet pang washes over her.

Ava: (playing along) I’ve heard! We should check it out sometime.

Max nods, but his eyes reveal that he’s miles away, contemplating decisions neither of them seem ready to face.