Question
The novel I’m evaluating is: Dry by Neal Shusterman and Jarrod Shusterman. The main points about the novel’s plot is that there is a huge water shortage called “The tap-out” and everyone is trying to get out of town or get as much water as they can. The main characters of the story are Alyssa, Kelton, Garret, Jacqui, and Henry. The setting takes place in California.
The plot is structured by slowly progressing on how the tap-out starts and how it ends and what happens in the middle of all of it. During the tap-out, schools are being repurposed to allow people to get water. Unfortunately, this method does not work and the people waiting for the water slowly dehydrate. People are fighting over water, breaking fish tanks, and buying as much water as they can from stores. The main characters of the story try a different way though, a less violent way.
Through the middle of the tap-out, the main characters change their behavior and try to make as much friends as possible to get water. As the story progresses, they get more desperate in trying to get water, as far as threatening someone with a fake gun. At on point they find a place they can stay, but they refuse to stay. This is because one of the main characters had a secret base with necessities in it. When they found out it had been raided, the main characters continued to walk around the ruined city of California.
The setting affects the characters because of the people that steal water before anyone else can get to it. In the beginning of the tap-out, people are taking every packet of water and any other drink they can from Costco. Small markets are safe either, as people were quick to take anything they could. When everything from the stores were gone, houses were the next target and people began to break into them, resulting in more water being stolen. The state of California slowly gets more ruined as the tap-out continues.
In conclusion, the tap-out is disastrous event that has happened in California where water was scarce and became the number one priority. The tap-out causes many changes in the main characters and their environment. During the tap-out, the main characters must work together to overpower the environment working against them. The main characters start to realize that getting water will not be so easy with the huge amount of people stealing water for themselves. In the end, the tap-out ends but many people were injured or lost.
Check for any grammar errors or anything else, do not rewrite into your own words please. List all errors.
Answers
GPT-4o mini
Here are the errors and suggestions for improvement in your text:
1. **"the novel’s plot is that there is a huge water shortage called 'The tap-out'"**
- Suggestion: Use "The novel's plot revolves around a huge water shortage called 'The Tap-Out'" to avoid redundancy with "is that."
2. **"the characters change their behavior and try to make as much friends as possible"**
- Error: "as much friends" should be "as many friends."
3. **"As the story progresses, they get more desperate in trying to get water, as far as threatening someone with a fake gun."**
- Suggestion: Consider rephrasing "as far as threatening someone with a fake gun" for clarity, possibly to "even going so far as to threaten someone with a fake gun."
4. **"At on point they find a place they can stay,"**
- Error: "At on point" should be "At one point."
5. **"because one of the main characters had a secret base with necessities in it."**
- Suggestion: To avoid ambiguity, consider specifying which character had the secret base.
6. **"small markets are safe either,"**
- Error: "are safe either" should be "are not safe either."
7. **"resulting in more water being stolen."**
- Suggestion: Consider clarifying how this connects to the actions of the characters or the overarching theme.
8. **"the tap-out is disastrous event that has happened in California"**
- Error: "is disastrous event" should be "is a disastrous event."
9. **"the tap-out causes many changes in the main characters and their environment."**
- Suggestion: "the tap-out causes many changes in both the main characters and their environment" may enhance clarity.
10. **"During the tap-out, the main characters must work together to overpower the environment working against them."**
- Suggestion: "to overcome the challenges of the environment working against them" could be clearer.
11. **"In the end, the tap-out ends but many people were injured or lost."**
- Suggestion: "the tap-out ends, but many people were injured or lost" should include a comma before "but" for correct punctuation.
Remember to review your text after making these changes to ensure clarity and coherence.
1. **"the novel’s plot is that there is a huge water shortage called 'The tap-out'"**
- Suggestion: Use "The novel's plot revolves around a huge water shortage called 'The Tap-Out'" to avoid redundancy with "is that."
2. **"the characters change their behavior and try to make as much friends as possible"**
- Error: "as much friends" should be "as many friends."
3. **"As the story progresses, they get more desperate in trying to get water, as far as threatening someone with a fake gun."**
- Suggestion: Consider rephrasing "as far as threatening someone with a fake gun" for clarity, possibly to "even going so far as to threaten someone with a fake gun."
4. **"At on point they find a place they can stay,"**
- Error: "At on point" should be "At one point."
5. **"because one of the main characters had a secret base with necessities in it."**
- Suggestion: To avoid ambiguity, consider specifying which character had the secret base.
6. **"small markets are safe either,"**
- Error: "are safe either" should be "are not safe either."
7. **"resulting in more water being stolen."**
- Suggestion: Consider clarifying how this connects to the actions of the characters or the overarching theme.
8. **"the tap-out is disastrous event that has happened in California"**
- Error: "is disastrous event" should be "is a disastrous event."
9. **"the tap-out causes many changes in the main characters and their environment."**
- Suggestion: "the tap-out causes many changes in both the main characters and their environment" may enhance clarity.
10. **"During the tap-out, the main characters must work together to overpower the environment working against them."**
- Suggestion: "to overcome the challenges of the environment working against them" could be clearer.
11. **"In the end, the tap-out ends but many people were injured or lost."**
- Suggestion: "the tap-out ends, but many people were injured or lost" should include a comma before "but" for correct punctuation.
Remember to review your text after making these changes to ensure clarity and coherence.